Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words and incorrect plural forms. For example, say you enjoy variety and explain why briefly.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, photographing both landscapes and city scenes keeps photography interesting, and it helps me develop different skills, such as composing shots for wide landscapes versus detailed urban scenes.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and use linking words (for example, because, although, however). Correct grammar (I prefer urban areas) and avoid repetition. Mention a concrete example or frequency to support your preference.

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because I live in a city and I enjoy the variety of architecture and street scenes. For example, I often photograph modern buildings and busy markets, while I only visit rural areas once a year, so I am more familiar with urban views.

제안: Start with a clear statement (I prefer views in other countries), then give concise reasons and one specific example. Use linking words (because, therefore) and correct phrasing (views in other countries, I live here). Avoid repetition and filler phrases.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I want to see different landscapes and cultures. For instance, visiting Japan allowed me to photograph unique temple gardens and cityscapes that are very different from the scenery in my hometown, which inspires my photography.

× I do like taking pictures for different fields 'cause it just you were getting bored if you just took a picture for one views.

✓ I do like taking pictures of different places because you get bored if you take pictures of the same view.

The student misused 'for' and 'fields' and mixed tenses and forms. Use 'taking pictures of' (correct preposition) and 'places' or 'views' (plural noun). Replace 'it just you were getting bored if you just took a picture for one views' with 'you get bored if you take pictures of the same view' to keep present simple meaning. Remove extra auxiliaries and incorrect plural 'views' with article; ensure consistent present tense.

× I prefer fuse in urban areas 'cause I live in ur urban areas and I think a rural area is so cool.

✓ I prefer living in urban areas because I live in an urban area and I think rural areas are very nice.

'Fuse' appears to be a mispronunciation; replace with 'living'. 'ur' should be 'an' or 'the' depending on meaning; here use 'an urban area'. Use plural 'rural areas are' rather than 'a rural area is so cool' to match general statement. Correct pronoun/article use and noun number.

× I get in rural just like one time in a year, but urban areas just like I move in urban now so I say like I prefer urban areas.

✓ I go to rural areas only about once a year, but I live in an urban area now, so I prefer urban areas.

Use 'go to' instead of 'get in', and 'once a year' rather than 'one time in a year'. 'I move in urban now' is incorrect; use 'I live in an urban area now'. Keep present simple for habitual facts. Rearrange to a clear natural order.

× I prefer views in another country 'cause I'm like, yeah, I stay at here in my country and just like saying the same views every day, every time I've I feel like I want to feel another views in another country And I think that's why I I put on my first hobbies is like traveling to another country to field of views.

✓ I prefer views in another country because I stay here in my country and see the same views every day, so I want to see different views in other countries. That's why one of my main hobbies is traveling to other countries to see new sights.

Many errors: 'stay at here' -> 'stay here'; 'saying the same views' -> 'see the same views'; 'every time I've I feel like' should be 'so I want to see'; 'another views' -> 'different views' (plural agreement); 'I put on my first hobbies' -> 'one of my main hobbies'; 'to field of views' -> 'to see new sights'. Use consistent simple present tense for habitual preferences and correct gerund/infinitive forms where needed.