Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is positive and relevant, but it is slightly repetitive and has some grammatical errors. To improve, give a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., "look, look"), correct grammar ("I can't record it as memory" → "I can't capture it in my memory"), and add one specific example or brief reason using a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so"). Keep it within four sentences.

예시: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because photos help me remember a place’s atmosphere. For example, when I photograph a coastal sunset, I can later recall the colours and the sound of waves. So I often take several shots to capture the mood and lighting.

제안: Your preference is clear, but the answer contains hesitations, repetition and a few mistakes ("fresh year" should be "fresh air"). To improve, state the preference directly, use one or two linked supporting details, avoid filler words, and correct vocabulary. Limit to up to three sentences with linking words like "because" and "for example."

예시: I prefer rural views because they have more greenery and peaceful lakes. For example, walking by a country lake with fresh air helps me relax and enjoy the scenery. Therefore I often choose rural spots for taking photos.

제안: Good idea to accept both, but your answer repeats phrases and has grammatical issues (singular/plural: "countries" vs "country", "greeneries" → "greenery"). To improve, make a concise topic sentence, give one specific contrast (what you like at home vs abroad), and use linking words such as "but" or "and". Keep it to three sentences max.

예시: I enjoy views both at home and abroad because each offers something different. At home I appreciate the abundant greenery, while in other countries I like exploring distinctive urban architecture. So I try to photograph both natural and city scenes when I travel.

× I love taking pictures of different views and sceneries because I can't record it as memory so whenever I look, look and scroll through my phone and see the view, I can feel the vibes and atmosphere of the place.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views and scenery because I can't record them as memories, so whenever I look and scroll through my phone and see the view, I can feel the vibes and atmosphere of the place.

Errors: 'sceneries' is uncommon; use 'scenery' as an uncountable noun. 'it' refers to plural 'pictures' or 'views', so use 'them'. 'memory' should be plural 'memories' to match context. Remove repeated 'look, look'. Improve flow with commas and conjunction. Suggestion: use uncountable nouns correctly, ensure pronoun agrees in number, and avoid unnecessary repetition. Grammar problem type ID:9

× I prefer views in rural areas because there are more, much more greenery and umm, lakes and also fresh air which make me feel uh, very good in the atmosphere, enjoying the scenery and the fresh year.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because there is much more greenery, lakes, and fresh air, which make me feel very good and let me enjoy the scenery and the fresh air.

Errors: 'there are more, much more greenery' is incorrect because 'greenery' is uncountable and takes singular verb 'is' or use 'more trees/green spaces' with 'are'. 'which make me' refers to plural list (greenery, lakes, fresh air) so 'make' is acceptable; keep consistent. 'the fresh year' is incorrect; intended 'the fresh air'. Suggestions: choose correct singular/plural forms for uncountable nouns, ensure relative clause agrees, and correct word choice ('air' not 'year'). Grammar problem type ID:27

× I prefer views in both in my own countries and also in other countries because there are lots of greeneries in my country, greenery in my country and also I would love to visit urban areas of other country which makes me feel good and relaxed.

✓ I prefer views both in my own country and in other countries because there is lots of greenery in my country, and I would also love to visit the urban areas of other countries, which make me feel good and relaxed.

Errors: 'in both in my own countries' has extra 'in' and 'countries' should be singular 'country' when referring to the speaker's country. 'greeneries' is incorrect plural; use uncountable 'greenery'. 'other country' needs plural 'other countries' or 'another country', and article 'the urban areas' is needed. Also 'which makes' should be 'which make' to agree with plural subject 'urban areas'. Suggestions: remove redundant prepositions, use correct singular/plural and article usage, and ensure subject-verb agreement in relative clauses. Grammar problem type ID:22