Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答总体表达清晰，内容具体，但存在语法错误、冗余和用词不当的问题。建议： 1) 改进语法与句子结构，避免重复（如“love take”、“photograph beautiful sceneries”重复表达）； 2) 控制长度在最多5句，首句直接回答，随后用1–2句具体举例并用连接词衔接； 3) 使用更恰当的词汇（例如“natural scenery”单数不可数，改为“natural scenes”或“scenery like sea sunsets”）； 4) 注意时态与固定搭配（capture the moment、take photos of people）。 具体练习：把回答压缩为三句并修正语法与衔接词。

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing both people and natural scenes because they capture different emotions and atmospheres. For example, I often take photos of my friends making funny faces to capture candid moments, and I photograph sea sunsets to record beautiful colors and calm moods.

제안: 回答有内容对比，但存在发音拼写错误（如“Violet's”应为“It's a”或“That's”）、词汇错误（lightning→lighting）、语法问题和啰嗦。建议： 1) 开头直接回应并明确偏好或平衡观点； 2) 修正拼写与词汇，用合适的连接词（however, on the other hand）； 3) 每个观点用一到两句具体描述并给出原因或感受； 4) 控制句子长度并避免不必要的附加从句。

예시: That's a difficult choice because I like both. In cities like Shanghai I enjoy the vibrant night lighting and impressive skyline, which feel exciting and modern. On the other hand, rural areas offer lush green landscapes that are peaceful and perfect for relaxing.

제안: 回答信息不足且句子不完整，存在语法错误与衔接问题（如“because which offers”不正确，结尾未完成）。建议： 1) 直接回答并给出清楚的原因； 2) 用完整句子列举具体景观并给出例子； 3) 避免重复信息（不需要多次说明未出国）； 4) 使用正确从句结构（because + 主句，或 which 从句修饰名词）。

예시: I would prefer views in my own country because it already offers a wide range of landscapes, from dense forests and lakes to snow-capped mountains. For instance, Qinghai has vast lakes and high plateaux that are breathtaking to visit.

× And I also love take beautiful sceneries, photograph beautiful sceneries like Sea Sunset.

✓ And I also love taking beautiful sceneries, photographing beautiful scenes like sea sunsets.

句中動詞需要跟動名詞（verb + -ing）。動詞 love 後若接另一動詞作賓語，應使用動名詞形式（love taking/photographing）。此外，scenery 是不可數名詞，應用單數形式或改為可數的 scenes；Sea Sunset 應小寫並用複數或更自然的表達。建議：love + doing；使用不可數名詞 scener y 或改為 scenes。

× Violet's a hard choice because I love both.

✓ It's a hard choice because I love both.

原句開頭用 Violet（人名）不合語境，應為 It（指選擇）。主語與動詞需一致，It is 縮寫為 It's。若非人名，使用 It 表示抽象的情況。建議：用 It's a hard choice。

× It has vibrant lightning and an impressive skyline.

✓ It has vibrant lighting and an impressive skyline.

lightning 指閃電（自然現象），此處應用 lighting（照明）或 lights 表示城市的燈光，屬於詞類用錯。建議記住 lightning（閃電） vs lighting（照明）。

× But rural areas are also appealing for their lush green landscapes, which is perfect for relaxing and it's a great escape from city.

✓ But rural areas are also appealing for their lush green landscapes, which are perfect for relaxing and a great escape from the city.

關係代詞 which 指代複數名詞 landscapes，故動詞應為 are 而非 is；且句尾需加定冠詞 the 表示特定的城市（the city）。另外，並列結構要一致（which are perfect... and a great escape...），建議使主語和動詞數一致並補上定冠詞。

× Well, I've never been out of my home, my country before, but I just say I'd prefer views in my own country because which offers a variety of beautiful landscapes from forests to snow capped mountains to lakes.

✓ Well, I've never been out of my home country before, but I'd say I prefer views in my own country because it offers a variety of beautiful landscapes, from forests and snow-capped mountains to lakes.

句子結構混亂：1) 'my home, my country' 冗餘，應為 'my home country'；2) 'I just say I'd prefer' 時態/語序不自然，改為 'I'd say I prefer' 更流暢；3) which 引導從句位置錯誤，應用代詞 it 來指代前文的 'my own country'；4) snow capped 應連字為 snow-capped；5) 列舉項目用 and 連接最後兩項更自然。建議注意代詞指代、形容詞連字符和自然語序。

× For example, Qinghai offers.

✓ For example, Qinghai offers many such landscapes.

原句缺少賓語，offers 後應接受詞；此外單獨句子語意不完整。需要補全內容以表達 Qinghai 提供何種景觀。建議在 offers 後加上名詞或名詞短語，例如 'many such landscapes'。