Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid saying you are 'photogenic' (which describes a person, not their camera habits), and give one or two specific examples of what you photograph and why. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially landscapes and other natural scenes. For example, I often photograph sunsets and mountain vistas because the light and colors are beautiful and change quickly, so I like to capture those moments with my iPhone.

제안: Answer directly, then add one clear reason for each preference using linking words. Reduce hesitation and grammar errors (e.g., subject-verb agreement). Keep answers within 2–3 sentences and avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'.

예시: It depends on my mood. If I'm socializing with family or friends I prefer urban areas because restaurants and shopping streets offer lively scenes, but when I want peace I choose rural areas for calm landscapes and nature photography.

제안: Give a clear direct answer and finish your thought. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrasing (e.g., 'if I'm take talking', 'as a tourist as a tourist'). Provide one concrete example explaining why you like photographing in your country and one for abroad. Keep to 2–3 polished sentences.

예시: I like photographing views both at home and abroad. At home I capture familiar landscapes and cultural scenes that matter to me, while abroad I enjoy shooting new places and architecture because they offer fresh perspectives and different lighting.

× I like taking pictures of different views especially landscape and some other natural views as well as I am a photogenic person.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views, especially landscapes and other natural scenes, as I am a photogenic person.

Use the plural 'landscapes' when speaking generally about types of views; 'scenes' is a more natural noun than repeating 'views'. Add a comma after 'views' and 'especially' for clarity. This corrects adjective/noun usage and improves sentence flow.

× I have my iPhone in which I like to click pictures.

✓ I have an iPhone, which I like to use to take pictures.

'My iPhone' is fine but 'in which I like to click pictures' is awkward and unidiomatic. Use 'an iPhone' and the verb phrase 'use to take pictures'. This fixes phrasing and ensures proper verb usage and collocation.

× Well, it depends on the time and on my mood as well.

✓ Well, it depends on the time and on my mood.

The present tense 'depends' is correct, but 'as well' is redundant after 'and'. Removing redundancy produces a more natural present-tense statement.

× Sometimes I like to go out with my family and friends, umm such as restaurants or some shopping areas.

✓ Sometimes I like to go out with my family and friends to places such as restaurants or shopping areas.

The original mixes verbs and examples awkwardly. Use 'to places such as' to introduce examples properly; remove filler 'umm'. This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× While on the other hand, if I are, if I like to uh sit, sit in any calm area, then I like to click pictures in a rural area.

✓ On the other hand, if I like to sit in a calm place, then I like to take pictures in a rural area.

'If I are' is incorrect; use 'I like'. Remove fillers 'uh' and repeated 'sit'. Use 'sit in a calm place' and the verb 'take pictures' which is more natural than 'click pictures'. This corrects subject-verb agreement and cleans sentence structure.

× To be honest, it depends on the personal choice.

✓ To be honest, it depends on personal preference.

'Personal choice' is understandable but 'personal preference' is the natural collocation in this context. The present tense 'depends' remains correct; this edits word choice for fluency.

× If I'm take talking about my own choice, then I prefer both my country and other countries.

✓ If I'm talking about my own choice, then I prefer both my country and other countries.

'I'm take talking' is ungrammatical. Use the present continuous 'I'm talking' to express the current topic. This corrects sentence structure and verb form.

× For example, if I am visiting a tourist as a tourist in another country as a international level, then I prefer to clicking my pictures over there.

✓ For example, if I am visiting another country as a tourist, then I prefer to take pictures there.

Original has redundancy and incorrect forms: 'visiting a tourist as a tourist' and 'as a international level' are incorrect. Use 'visiting another country as a tourist' and the infinitive 'to take pictures'. This fixes sentence structure, article use ('a international' -> 'an international' if used), and verb form.

× On the other hand side, if I am in.

✓ On the other hand, if I am in my own country, I also like to take pictures.

The original is an incomplete sentence. Complete it by specifying 'in my own country' and a verb phrase 'I also like to take pictures' to finish the thought. This corrects sentence fragment and provides a natural contrast.