Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, fix tense and article errors, and avoid redundancy. Use one or two supporting details with linking words. For example, replace “I love to take picture of nature” with “Yes, I love taking photos of natural scenes.” Clarify when and why you take photos (e.g. “When the sky looks dramatic, I often photograph it because it creates mood”).

예시: Yes, I love taking photos of natural scenes. For example, when the sky looks dramatic or gloomy, I often photograph it because the clouds and light create a strong mood that’s interesting in both portraits and landscapes.

제안: Give a clear direct answer and use coherent supporting points with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Say which you prefer (or that you like both) and explain why with specific examples. Correct verb forms and article use (e.g. “in urban areas” not “in urban area”).

예시: It depends, but I generally prefer urban views because I enjoy photographing skyscrapers and the way light reflects off glass. However, I also like rural scenes for wide landscapes and natural textures, so I often choose based on the mood I want to capture.

제안: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use specific reasons and examples to support your preference, and correct article and plural errors (e.g. “my country”, “many tourists”). Add a linking word to connect ideas. Mention particular places or features to be more specific.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because it has diverse and beautiful landscapes, such as coastal cliffs and mountain valleys. For instance, many tourists visit our national parks each year to see the scenery, which makes me proud of those familiar views.

× Yes, I love to take picture of nature.

✓ Yes, I love to take pictures of nature.

The noun 'picture' should be plural here because it refers to taking multiple photos generally. Use the plural form 'pictures' with the verb phrase 'take pictures of'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns when speaking about things in general or multiple instances (take pictures, eat apples).

× Whenever I saw some gloomy sky, I tried to make a portrait or a landscape view of the sky.

✓ Whenever I see a gloomy sky, I try to make a portrait or a landscape view of it.

The speaker is describing a habitual action, so present simple tense ('see', 'try') is required rather than past tense. Also 'gloomy sky' should take the article 'a' and 'of the sky' is more naturally 'of it' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: Use present simple for habits and use appropriate articles and pronouns to avoid repetition.

× It actually depends on where I am.

✓ It actually depends on where I am.

This sentence is correct. No change required.

× Especially in urban area I love to taking some pictures of some sky skyscrapers or they Skype mainly and the other side I mean rural area I I want to take.

✓ Especially in urban areas I love taking pictures of skyscrapers, while in rural areas I want to photograph the landscape.

Multiple errors: 'urban area' should be plural 'urban areas' for general statement (Article errors/Plural); 'love to taking' mixes infinitive and -ing form — use 'love taking' or 'love to take' (Verb + -ing form). 'some sky skyscrapers or they Skype mainly' is unclear and contains wrong words ('sky skyscrapers', 'they Skype') and pronoun issues. Use 'skyscrapers' and 'while' to contrast urban and rural preferences. Also remove duplicate 'I'. Suggestion: Use 'love taking' for preferences, use plural nouns for general statements, and keep contrasts concise with 'while' or 'but'.

× Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?

✓ Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?

This question sentence is correct. No change required.

× I prefer the view of my countries, of my country, because my country is so beautiful and the landscape and the landscape are so fabulous.

✓ I prefer the views of my country because it is so beautiful and the landscapes are fabulous.

Errors: 'the view of my countries, of my country' is repetitive and inconsistent; choose singular 'my country'. Use plural 'views' and 'landscapes' when speaking generally. Replace 'my country is so beautiful and the landscape and the landscape are so fabulous' with concise phrasing. Also change 'it' to refer to 'my country'. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and match singular/plural consistently when referring to a country and its features.

× Every year many of tourists come to visit our country.

✓ Every year many tourists come to visit our country.

The phrase 'many of tourists' is incorrect. Use 'many tourists' without 'of' when referring to a large number of countable nouns. 'Come to visit' is acceptable but 'visit our country' is more natural. Suggestion: Use 'many' directly with plural countable nouns: 'many tourists', not 'many of tourists'.