Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct singular/plural and article use, and add one concise supporting detail using a linking word. Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me capture the full context of a scene. For example, I often take wide shots first and then focus on interesting details to tell a complete story.

제안: Answer directly and correct grammar (use singular/plural and articles). Avoid interjections like 'whoa' and remove fillers. Use linking words to organize supporting details and provide specific examples rather than vague lists. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer rural areas because I love natural scenery. For example, I enjoy photographing rivers, forests and open fields, which feel more peaceful than city streets. This gives me a wider variety of natural subjects to capture.

제안: Be concise and avoid conversational fillers like 'you know' and repeated 'uh'. Use accurate collocations (e.g., 'natural scenery' not 'sceneries') and provide one specific reason or example with a linking word to strengthen the answer.

예시: I prefer views in my country because China has very diverse landscapes. For instance, you can visit mountains in the west and coastal scenery in the east, so I can explore many different types of views without traveling abroad.

× I think taking picture in different views could, uh, establish the whole picture of this target.

✓ I think taking pictures from different viewpoints could establish a complete picture of the subject.

The noun 'picture' should be plural ('pictures') when speaking generally. 'Taking picture' requires pluralization (Grammar problem type 1: Singular and plural issue). Also 'in different views' is awkward; use 'from different viewpoints' for clarity (preposition and word choice). 'Whole picture of this target' is unnatural; 'a complete picture of the subject' is clearer. The sentence uses the gerund 'taking' correctly (verb + -ing) but needed noun number and improved preposition/word choice. Suggestion: use 'taking pictures from different viewpoints' and 'a complete picture of the subject.'

× Whoa, absolutely a rural areas because I love natural scenery.

✓ Whoa, absolutely rural areas, because I love natural scenery.

The phrase 'a rural areas' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'areas' (Grammar problem type 1). Remove the article or make both singular: either 'a rural area' or 'rural areas'. In context the speaker prefers rural areas in general, so 'rural areas' without 'a' is correct. Also 'Whoa' is conversational filler; keep or remove as desired.

× So I love the trees, the grass, the legs, the rivers, all the things will uh, be seeing in rural areas.

✓ So I love the trees, the grass, the lakes, the rivers, and all the things you can see in rural areas.

The original has 'legs' which is a wrong word choice; likely intended 'lakes' (Grammar problem type 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs/wrong word). Also the clause 'all the things will uh, be seeing in rural areas' uses incorrect grammar and unnatural passive/future form. Replace with 'all the things you can see' to express ability/observation in general. Suggestion: list items correctly and use 'you can see' for general statements.

× I prefer views in my country because, you know, China is a big country and you can find all sort of, uh, natural sceneries in China.

✓ I prefer views in my country because, you know, China is a big country and you can find all sorts of natural scenery in China.

Errors: 'all sort of' should be 'all sorts of' (Grammar problem type 11: Incorrect use of prepositions/phrases). 'Natural sceneries' is nonstandard; the uncountable noun 'scenery' should be used instead of plural 'sceneries' (Grammar problem type 1: Singular and plural issue). Correct phrase: 'all sorts of natural scenery.'

× So I think, uh, traveling in China, uh, is the best choice for me to explore the views.

✓ So I think traveling in China is the best choice for me to see these views.

The original is understandable but wordy and slightly awkward. 'Traveling in China is the best choice for me to explore the views' is acceptable, but 'explore the views' is not a natural collocation; native speakers say 'see these views' or 'explore them.' This is a sentence structure/style issue (Grammar problem type 26). Suggestion: streamline to 'traveling in China is the best choice for me to see these views.'