Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сосредоточьтесь на грамматике и плавности. Исправьте ошибки времени и формы глагола (например, «capturing» → «capture»), уберите лишние междометия («umm, uh») и закончите мысль ясно (например, «I can keep the memories on my phone»). Добавьте одно-два конкретных примера, чтобы подкрепить утверждение, и используйте связку для плавного перехода.

예시: Yes, I do. I love to capture photos of nature and landscapes, especially sunsets, because they help me keep memories on my phone. For example, I often photograph the sunset at the local beach because the colours change dramatically, which makes each photo unique.

제안: Улучшите структуру и точность выражений. Уберите тавтологию и повторы (например, «there is there are»), сократите междометия и используйте связочные слова, чтобы объяснить причину предпочтения. Добавьте конкретные детали (типы зданий, время суток) для более богатого содержания.

예시: I prefer photographing urban areas because of the variety of modern buildings and vibrant street life. For instance, I enjoy taking photos of illuminated skyscrapers at night and candid shots of people in busy markets, which create dynamic and contrast-rich images.

제안: Улучшите ясность и грамматику. Избегайте неясных фраз («where we are sense», «of the beaten path») и повторов. Объясните конкретно, что именно делает виды за границей привлекательными (климат, архитектура, культура) и используйте связки для логического объяснения.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different climates and unique cultural landscapes. For example, I find coastal villages in the Mediterranean fascinating due to their bright colours and historic architecture, which contrast with the scenery at home.

× I love to capturing pictures, especially nature, different landscapes, sunsets, umm, because uh, I can remain the memories on my phone and.

✓ I love capturing pictures, especially of nature, different landscapes and sunsets, because I can keep the memories on my phone.

The phrase 'love to capturing' mixes an infinitive 'to' with a gerund 'capturing'; after 'love' we use either the infinitive ('to capture') or the gerund ('capturing'), but not both. Also 'capturing pictures' is acceptable but 'capture pictures' or 'capturing pictures' are more natural; 'especially nature' needs the preposition 'of' and items in a list should be joined with 'and'. 'Remain the memories' is incorrect: the correct verb is 'keep' (or 'preserve') with 'memories' as object. Suggest using 'I love capturing pictures... because I can keep the memories on my phone.'

× Especially, I'm really keen on photographing urban areas. As a result, there is there are many modern buildings, umm, lights and uh, people there are so interesting.

✓ I'm really keen on photographing urban areas. As a result, there are many modern buildings, lights, and interesting people there.

The sentence contains redundancy 'there is there are' — use only 'there are' for plural nouns. Also word order and punctuation were awkward; put the list items together and place the adjective 'interesting' before 'people' or after with a clearer structure. Remove unnecessary filler words. 'As a result' is acceptable but ensure it connects properly. This correction uses 'there are' for plural subject agreement and fixes word order for clarity.

× In my eyes, views abroad are more interesting and really exciting because there are different climates, uh, where we are sense, uh, exotic areas and there is, there is of the beaten path.

✓ In my opinion, views abroad are more interesting and exciting because there are different climates; we can experience exotic areas and places off the beaten path.

'In my eyes' is a literal translation; the idiomatic phrase is 'in my opinion'. 'Where we are sense' is ungrammatical — likely intended 'we can experience' or 'we get a sense of'. 'There is, there is of the beaten path' is incorrect; the idiom is 'off the beaten path'. Use ';' or a conjunction to join related clauses. This correction replaces incorrect prepositions and phrases with idiomatic alternatives and fixes the idiom 'off the beaten path'.