Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장이 반복적이고 어법 오류가 있습니다. 먼저 주제 문장으로 간단히 응답한 뒤, 구체적인 이유와 예시를 한두 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 문법적으로는 단수·복수 형태(views), 관사(a/the), 시제와 동사 형태를 정확히 사용하세요. 또한 연결어(for example, because, so)를 사용해 응답의 흐름을 자연스럽게 만드세요.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me discover new perspectives. For example, when I walk around my city I often find interesting angles of buildings or parks that make ordinary scenes look unique.

제안: 응답이 장황하고 문법적 오류(과거분사 사용, 관사, 어순)가 눈에 띕니다. 먼저 선호를 분명히 밝히고, 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요(예: 조용함, 자연광, 색감). 연결어(since, because, so, therefore)를 사용해 문장을 매끄럽게 연결하고 문장 수는 3~4문장으로 제한하세요.

예시: I prefer rural views because I grew up in the countryside and find them calming. The open fields and natural light create peaceful scenes that are great for photography. For instance, I often photograph morning mist over rice paddies when I visit my hometown.

제안: 응답이 불분명하고 문장이 완결되지 않았습니다(‘most of you’ 같은 오류와 문장 미완성). 먼저 간단히 선호를 말한 뒤 이유(다양성, 새로운 문화, 다른 건축 양식 등)를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 또한 문장을 완결형으로 만들고, 불필요한 반복을 제거하세요.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different scenery and cultural styles. Having lived in Korea for 25 years, I’ve already seen many local places, so I enjoy travelling abroad to photograph unfamiliar streets and landscapes, such as colorful markets or historic architecture.

× Yes, I like to take a picture of different view because I can find some new one in the different view.

✓ Yes, I like to take pictures of different views because I can find something new in different views.

'Picture' and 'view' should be plural when speaking generally about multiple items: use pictures and views. 'Some new one' is unnatural; 'something new' fits better. Remove the article 'the' before 'different view' when speaking generally. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general activities and prefer 'something' for unspecified singular objects.

× So I love to take a picture of different view.

✓ So I love to take pictures of different views.

Same issue: when describing a habitual activity involving multiple instances, use plural nouns 'pictures' and 'views' rather than singular. This makes the sentence grammatically correct and natural.

× I like to take a picture of the rural areas because I lived in rural area at young age so it is more comfortable and feel made me happy.

✓ I like to take pictures of rural areas because I lived in a rural area when I was young, so it feels more comfortable and makes me happy.

Multiple problems: use plural 'pictures' and plural or uncountable 'rural areas' consistently. 'Lived in rural area' needs an article: 'a rural area'. 'At young age' should be 'when I was young'. 'Feel made me happy' is incorrect: use 'feels more comfortable and makes me happy' for present feelings. These corrections align verb forms and article usage.

× So I want to take a rural area.

✓ So I want to take photos of rural areas.

'Take a rural area' is incorrect because 'take' cannot directly take an area as an object. Use 'take photos of' to express photographing places. Also plural 'rural areas' is more natural when speaking generally.

× I like the other countries because I lived in Korea for 25 years, so I can see the most of you in the Korea.

✓ I like other countries because I lived in Korea for 25 years, so I have seen most places in Korea.

Problems: 'the other countries' should be 'other countries' when speaking generally. 'So I can see the most of you in the Korea' is ungrammatical and unclear: likely intended 'I have seen most places in Korea.' Use 'have seen' for experience and remove article 'the' before 'Korea'. Replace 'you' with 'places'.

× So I want to find some new scenery so I prefer to see the.

✓ So I want to find new scenery, so I prefer to see other countries.

Original sentence ends abruptly 'see the.' Needs a clear object: 'other countries' or 'new places.' Also 'some new scenery' is okay but 'new scenery' is smoother. Combine clauses with a comma and ensure the second clause has a complete object.