Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question directly, then give one or two brief supporting details using correct grammar and avoiding filler or inappropriate words. Use linking words if adding a reason or example.

예시: Not really. I’m not into photography and I don’t own a camera. However, some friends enjoy taking photos and sometimes ask me to model for them, which I don’t mind occasionally.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and then two specific reasons linked smoothly. Reduce hesitations and correct basic grammar (plural/singular, articles). Use linking phrases such as 'because' or 'for example' to organize ideas.

예시: I prefer rural views because they offer varied natural scenery. For example, you can see mountains, beaches and open fields, and the quieter atmosphere feels more charming and unique than the crowded, high-rise urban skyline.

제안: Answer directly, then support with specific, well-structured details and correct grammar (tenses, articles, singular/plural). Use linking words like 'for example' and avoid repetition. Provide one or two vivid examples of landscapes.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because Morocco has very diverse landscapes. For example, we have beautiful beaches on the coast, rugged mountains like the Atlas range, and even parts of the Sahara Desert, so there is always something different to see.

× I don't even like buy a camera for myself, but I have some friends who actually love it and take me sometimes as a model.

✓ I don't even like to buy a camera for myself, but I have some friends who actually love photography and sometimes take my picture as a model.

The original sentence has a verb form issue and wording awkwardness; 'like buy' is incorrect — after 'like' you should use 'to' + base verb or the gerund 'buying'. Also 'love it' is vague; 'love photography' is clearer. 'Take me sometimes as a model' is unidiomatic; use 'sometimes take my picture as a model'. Use of articles was not the main issue here but wording and infinitive form needed correction.

× the difference in urban areas is like the building are way too high.

✓ The difference in urban areas is that the buildings are way too high.

'the building are' fails subject-verb agreement and plural noun form: 'building' should be plural 'buildings' to match the plural verb 'are'. Also the sentence needs a connector 'that' for clarity: 'is that the buildings are...'.

× You cannot really see any landscape, mountain or beach area, for example, Umm, And also I think rural, uh, has like a little charm and it's making unique, you know, that's why I love it.

✓ You cannot really see much landscape, mountains or the beach, for example. Also, I think rural areas have a certain charm and are unique; that's why I love them.

Mixed number and article errors with tense/usage: 'any landscape, mountain or beach area' is unnatural — use 'much landscape, mountains or the beach'. 'rural has like a little charm' is incorrect: 'rural areas have a certain charm' uses correct noun form and verb agreement. 'it's making unique' is ungrammatical; use 'are unique'. Pronoun agreement: 'that's why I love them' matches plural 'rural areas'. These corrections keep present-tense general statements.

× I prefer views in my home country.

✓ I prefer the views in my home country.

While 'I prefer views in my home country' is understandable, adding the definite article 'the' before 'views' makes the noun phrase specific and more natural when comparing categories of views (home country versus elsewhere). Article use improves clarity.

× Actually, Morocco is one of the best and most beautiful country that I ever seen in my life.

✓ Actually, Morocco is one of the best and most beautiful countries that I have ever seen in my life.

Errors: 'country' should be plural 'countries' to match 'one of the ... countries'. The verb 'seen' requires an auxiliary: use present perfect 'have ever seen' for experiences up to now. This fixes number and tense.

× You know, we have beach area, mountain, lake, any type of landscape.

✓ You know, we have beaches, mountains, lakes — every type of landscape.

Use of singular count nouns without articles is incorrect. Use plural forms 'beaches, mountains, lakes' for general statements. 'Any type of landscape' is awkward; 'every type of landscape' or 'all kinds of landscapes' is more natural. This fixes preposition/article and noun-number usage.

× We also have a part of the desert as well.

✓ We also have part of the desert.

Redundancy and article use: 'a part of the desert as well' is wordy; 'part of the desert' is sufficient. If intending to mean 'a portion', 'a part of the desert' is acceptable, but 'also' and 'as well' together are redundant; remove one.