Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 全体として意味は伝わりますが、文法（複数形、冠詞、動詞の形）と語順を改善するとより自然です。また、回答は簡潔なトピック文の後に具体的な補足（どのような景色か、どのように保存するかなど）を1〜2文で加えると良いです。リンク語（for example, so that）を使って理由や結果をつなげてください。

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember my trips. For example, I often photograph coastal sunsets and city skylines so that I can look back at the memories later.

제안: 発音や語彙の誤用（'Roblox'→'rural'、'creature'→'beautiful'など）と文法（短縮や語順）を修正する必要があります。トピック文で明確に答え、その後で理由を具体的に述べ、接続詞（because, so, therefore）を使って論理を明確にしてください。文は最大5文に抑え、冗長を避けます。

예시: I prefer rural views to urban ones because they are more peaceful and closer to nature. I live in the countryside, so I often enjoy wide open fields and fresh air, which I find very relaxing.

제안: 回答が不明瞭で多くの語彙・文法ミス（'Bruce'、不適切な比較表現や冠詞）が見られます。まず直接に答え（own country / other countries）を述べ、次に理由を具体的に1〜2文で説明してください。数や場所の具体例（mountains, temples, coastlines）を挙げると説得力が増します。また、不要なあいまい語（uh）は控えてください。

예시: I prefer views in my own country because Japan has many beautiful places to visit. For example, I love the mountain scenery in the Japanese Alps and the coastal views along the Pacific, which are very scenic and culturally interesting.

× Yes, I like taking a picture of different views because taking picture helps me to remember all my trips.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because taking pictures helps me remember all my trips.

The noun 'picture' should be plural when referring to the general action of taking more than one; use 'taking pictures'. Also after 'helps me' the verb should be in the base form without 'to' (helps me remember), not 'helps me to remember'. Use of gerund 'taking' is correct, but maintain consistent plural 'pictures'.

× I prefer Roblox areas to urban areas because they're creature and closer to nature.

✓ I prefer rural areas to urban areas because they're quieter and closer to nature.

The student likely meant 'rural' not 'Roblox'; this is a wrong word choice (adjective). 'Creature' is incorrect; context requires an adjective like 'quieter' to compare. Use 'rural' for countryside and 'quieter' for less noisy; ensure adjectives correctly describe 'areas'.

× I live in the countryside so beautiful open views and fresh air are a normal part of my life.

✓ I live in the countryside, so beautiful open views and fresh air are a normal part of my life.

A comma is needed before 'so' when it connects two independent clauses. The sentence is otherwise acceptable, but punctuation improves clarity. Also consider adding an article if focusing on specific features: 'the beautiful open views'. Ensure clause linkage is correct.

× I like Bruce of these views, but I like more like is my own countries.

✓ I like both of these views, but I prefer the views in my own country.

'Bruce' is incorrect and should be 'both' (a determiner), 'like more like is' is ungrammatical: use 'prefer' to express preference. 'Countries' should be singular 'country' when referring to the speaker's own nation. Correct pronouns/determiners and verb choice for clarity.

× That's because, uh, Japan has a many beautiful views in or in country.

✓ That's because, uh, Japan has many beautiful views in my country.

The article 'a' should not be used before 'many' (use 'many' alone). The phrase 'in or in country' is incorrect; use 'in my country' to indicate possession/ location. Remove extraneous words and use correct article/possessive structures.