Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 질문을 그대로 반복하지 말고, 질문에 직접 답하세요. 간단한 주제문으로 시작한 뒤 한두 문장으로 이유나 예시를 덧붙이세요. 또한 불필요한 반복을 피하고 연결어를 사용해 답변을 자연스럽게 이어가세요. 예: "Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because..."처럼 시작하세요.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they capture unique moods. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the beach, which show vibrant colors and changing light.

제안: 질문을 반복하지 말고 즉각적으로 선호를 밝히세요. 선호의 이유와 구체적인 비교를 한두 문장으로 제시해 대화를 풍부하게 만드세요. 연결어(so, because, although)를 사용하면 논리적으로 들립니다.

예시: I prefer rural views because they are calmer and more natural. Although urban scenes are interesting, I like wide landscapes and green fields for relaxation.

제안: 질문에 더 직접적으로 답하고 내용의 논리와 문법을 개선하세요. 첫 문장은 명확한 선호(own country or other countries)를 제시하고, 이유와 구체적 예시를 1–2문장으로 덧붙이세요. 중복 표현("big ocean view" 반복)과 어색한 문장 연결을 줄이기 위해 연결어를 적절히 쓰세요. 또한 시제와 전치사 오류를 고치세요. 예: "I prefer views in my own country because..."으로 시작하세요.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I live near the coast and can see the ocean from my house. For instance, I often sit by the window to watch the waves and sometimes go swimming with friends, which makes the scenery special to me.

× I prepare my own country because my country has a big ocean view, so I can see the big ocean view in my house too. So I love to look out of the view and go swimming with my friends too.

✓ I prefer my own country because it has a large ocean view, and I can see the ocean from my house. I also love looking at the view and going swimming with my friends.

The student used 'prepare' incorrectly; the intended meaning is 'prefer' (vocabulary choice). The sentence has awkward present-tense constructions and repetition ('big ocean view' repeated). The clause 'I can see the big ocean view in my house' is unnatural; use 'from my house.' 'Look out of the view' is incorrect; use 'look at the view' or 'look out at the view.' Combine short sentences for clarity. Suggestions: replace 'prepare' with 'prefer', avoid repeating adjectives, use 'from my house' for viewing location, and use 'look at the view' and parallel verbs 'love ... and ...' for smoother structure.