Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Mejora la claridad y la gramática: usa una oración temática directa, corrige verbos y elimina repeticiones. Añade detalles específicos y enlaza ideas con conectores simples (for example, because, and). Por ejemplo, organiza la respuesta en 2–3 oraciones cortas, corrige errores como "I really enjoying" → "I really enjoy", y evita duplicar palabras (por ejemplo, "for example" repetido).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often take portraits of my family and landscape photos when I travel. In Ireland, I like photographing coastal cliffs and green fields because the light and scenery are beautiful.

제안: Mejora la fluidez y la precisión: empieza con una oración completa que responda directamente, elimina muletillas y repeticiones, y usa conectores para justificar tu preferencia. Sé específico sobre qué elementos rurales te atraen (beaches, farms, old houses).

예시: I prefer taking pictures in rural areas because there are more natural views to capture. For example, I like photographing beaches, old farmhouses, and wide fields, which offer varied textures and peaceful atmospheres.

제안: Mejora la estructura y la precisión: responde directamente (I prefer...), evita repeticiones y combina razones claras con un conector. Añade detalles específicos sobre lo que disfrutas de ver en el extranjero frente a casa y limita la respuesta a 2–3 oraciones útiles.

예시: I prefer visiting views in other countries because they feel new and different. For instance, when I travel abroad I enjoy discovering unfamiliar architecture and landscapes, and it also gives me a chance to practice English while exploring.

× You for example a portrait when I take a photo of my family or for example when I go to different landscape, I really enjoying taking pictures there.

✓ For example, a portrait when I take a photo of my family, or when I go to different landscapes; I really enjoy taking pictures there.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun use and other issues: 'You for example a portrait' is ungrammatical and likely meant 'For example, a portrait'. 'Different landscape' should be plural 'different landscapes'. 'I really enjoying' uses the wrong verb form; use simple present 'I really enjoy' to express a habitual action. Also punctuation and clause connections needed fixing. Suggestion: start with 'For example,' use plural for countable nouns, and use base verb after 'I' for present tense actions.

× For example, here in Ireland there are a lot of landscape to to deserve picture.

✓ For example, here in Ireland there are a lot of landscapes worth photographing.

'A lot of landscape' is incorrect because 'landscape' is countable here and should be plural: 'a lot of landscapes'. The phrase 'to to deserve picture' is ungrammatical; a natural expression is 'worth photographing'. Use 'worth' + gerund to indicate something is deserving of an action. Suggestion: use plural nouns for multiple items and idiomatic expressions like 'worth photographing'.

× Prefer taking picture in rural areas because we you have to you have you can see so you can see more landscape use for example beaches or rural houses housing rural houses.

✓ I prefer taking pictures in rural areas because you can see more landscapes there, for example beaches or rural houses.

The original sentence has many disfluent repetitions and incorrect phrase order. 'Prefer taking picture' should be 'I prefer taking pictures' (missing subject and plural noun). Remove redundant words 'we you have to you have you can see so you can see'. Use 'landscapes' plural and place examples after a comma. Suggestion: include the subject 'I', use plural for countable nouns, and keep clauses concise and correctly ordered.

× Prefer taking picture in rural areas because we you have to you have you can see so you can see more landscape use for example beaches or rural houses housing rural houses.

✓ I prefer taking pictures in rural areas because you can see more landscapes, such as beaches or rural houses.

'Taking picture' should be 'taking pictures' (plural). 'More landscape' should be 'more landscapes' to match plural sense. Also 'housing rural houses' is redundant; use 'rural houses' only. Suggestion: use plural forms for general or multiple items and avoid redundancy.

× Partly the same. I really like my my views in my own country, but there are I'm I'm used to see them.

✓ Partly the same. I really like the views in my own country, but I am used to seeing them.

'I'm used to see' is incorrect; the correct structure is 'be used to' followed by a noun or gerund, so use 'used to seeing'. Also 'my my views' is a repetition; 'the views' is more natural. 'I am' is preferred to 'I'm' in formal corrections but contraction is acceptable; however the key error is verb form after 'used to'. Suggestion: use 'used to' + gerund for habitual familiarity and remove duplicate words.

× So I prefer to go to go abroad and go and see another views in another country and enjoy them and improve my English at the same time and enjoy.

✓ So I prefer to go abroad and see other views in another country, enjoy them, and improve my English at the same time.

The sentence contains unnecessary repetitions 'to go to go' and 'go and see' and wrong noun form 'another views' which mixes singular 'another' with plural 'views'; use 'other views'. Keep verbs in simple present/present preference form 'I prefer to go' and list activities in parallel form. Suggestion: remove duplicate verbs, use 'other' with plural nouns, and maintain parallel structure for coordinated verbs.