Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변을 보다 자연스럽고 정확한 문장으로 다듬고, 중복 표현과 문법 오류를 고치세요. 주제문으로 시작한 뒤 하나나 두 개의 구체적 세부사항(예: 어떤 장면을 찍는지, 사진이 왜 특별한지)을 연결어로 덧붙이면 응답이 명확해집니다. 예를 들어 시제와 관사 사용을 바로잡고 'when I look back at them' 같은 표현과 'memories of a particular place'처럼 구체적인 표현을 사용하세요.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photos help me preserve memories. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city streets, and when I look back at the images I can remember the atmosphere and my feelings at that time.

제안: 핵심 이유는 잘 제시했으나 시제와 어순, 반복을 정리하세요. 'have had' 대신 현재형 'have'를 쓰고 'see the stars clearly'처럼 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요. 또한 간단한 연결어(예: therefore, so)를 사용해 이유와 개인적 느낌을 깔끔하게 이어주세요.

예시: I prefer rural views because there is less light pollution, so I can see the stars very clearly. Therefore, I often visit the countryside at night to enjoy the sky and relax.

제안: 문법과 표현을 정리해 직접적이고 자연스럽게 답하세요. 'I grew up in my country for about 20 years, so I'm familiar with its views'처럼 명확한 주제문을 사용하고, 'but' 뒤에 새로운 경험에 대한 구체적 이유(예: cultural differences, landscapes) 를 덧붙이세요. 문장을 간결하게 유지하고 감정 표현은 구체적 근거와 함께 말하면 설득력이 높아집니다.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I grew up in my country and am already familiar with its scenery. I enjoy discovering unfamiliar landscapes and cultures, so seeing new views abroad makes me feel excited and inspired.

× Yes, I really like to take pictures in different views because I can keep the photos and when I look back them again it brings me to the memories.

✓ Yes, I really like taking pictures of different scenes because I can keep the photos and when I look back at them it brings back memories.

Pronoun object placement and verb forms: 'look back them' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'look back at them'. 'Look back at them again it brings me to the memories' is ungrammatical and unclear; use 'it brings back memories'. Also 'take pictures in different views' is unnatural; 'taking pictures of different scenes' or 'views' is better. Use gerund 'taking' after 'like'. Suggestions: Use 'like + -ing' for preferences (I like taking...), use 'look back at' for reviewing photos, and use 'bring back memories' for recalling the past.

× So if I have a different pictures in different views I can remember the memories in diapers place.

✓ So if I have different pictures of different places I can remember the memories of those places.

Plural agreement and word choice: 'a different pictures' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'pictures' — remove 'a' or use singular. 'different views' is acceptable but 'different places' fits context. 'in diapers place' is likely a typo; correct to 'those places' and add 'of' for 'memories of those places'. Suggestions: Match articles and nouns (a + singular, no article + plural), correct typos, and use 'memories of (something)'.

× I prefer views in rural areas because rural areas have had less lights, so I can see those stars on the sky really clearly and I really like to see the stars.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because rural areas have fewer lights, so I can see the stars in the sky very clearly and I really like seeing them.

Tense and count noun issues: 'have had' suggests a past perfect that is unnecessary; present simple 'have' is correct for a general statement. 'less lights' is incorrect with a count noun; use 'fewer lights'. 'on the sky' should be 'in the sky'. 'really clearly' is wordy—'very clearly' is more natural. Use gerund 'seeing' after 'like'. Suggestions: Use present simple for general truths, 'fewer' with countable nouns, preposition 'in' for sky, and prefer 'like + -ing'.

× I prefer views in other countries because I grew in my countries like for 20 years do I know that the view?

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I grew up in my country for about 20 years, so I already know those views.

Pronoun and auxiliary errors: 'grew in my countries' should be 'grew up in my country' (singular) or 'countries' only if multiple, but context implies one country. 'like for 20 years' is informal and awkward; 'for about 20 years' is natural. 'do I know that the view?' is ungrammatical as a tag question; use 'so I already know those views' or 'so I'm familiar with them'. Suggestions: Use 'grow up in' to indicate childhood, ensure subject-number agreement, and use clear clause connectors like 'so' to show consequence.

× But I really like to try new things, so if I can see another country's view, it might make me so happy and excited.

✓ But I really like trying new things, so if I can see the view in another country, it would make me very happy and excited.

Modal and conditional clarity: 'might make me so happy and excited' is understandable but 'would make me very happy and excited' fits a hypothetical preference more naturally. Use 'trying' after 'like'. 'another country's view' is slightly awkward; 'the view in another country' is clearer. Suggestions: Use 'would' for unreal or hypothetical situations, prefer 'very' over 'so' in formal statements, and use 'like + -ing' consistently.