Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сократите количество заполнителей (uh, umm), говорите короче и чётче. Начните с чётного топик‑предложения, затем добавьте 1–2 специфических детали (какие именно виды природы, чем они нравятся) и завершите коротким заключением. Используйте связки (because, so, for example) и проверьте грамматику (a camera, taking pictures of myself). Примерная структура: 1 предложение — прямой ответ; 1–2 предложения — детали с причинами/примером; 1 короткое заключение.

예시: Yes, I do. I prefer taking pictures of nature because I find landscapes and plants more interesting than people. For example, I enjoy photographing mountain views at sunrise because the light and colours change quickly. So I usually focus on scenery rather than selfies.

제안: Уберите неуверенные формулировки (maybe, actually) и повторения, говорите последовательно: прямой ответ, причина, пример. Уточните, что именно интересно в городских видах (архитектура, уличная жизнь, парки) и используйте связки (because, for example, however). Исправьте фразы: "I prefer walking in a park" → "I prefer walking in parks". Ограничьтесь максимум 3–4 предложениями.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the architecture and busy street life. For example, I like walking in city parks where modern buildings mix with green spaces. Because of that, I often take photos of streets, cafés and public art.

제안: Говорите в настоящем времени (I prefer), избегайте повторов (I love I love) и размытых выражений (being too into travel). Дайте конкретные причины и примеры: культутра, архитектура, природа, и поясните, почему это отличается от вашей страны. Используйте связки (because, for example, such as) и не более 3–4 предложений.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I love travelling and seeing different cultures. For example, I enjoy traditional villages and coastal landscapes abroad, which often look very different from my home country. Because of these differences, I usually choose destinations with rich scenery and local traditions.

× I don't have enough, umm, camera to take pictures, but uh, I prefer to take pictures of nature because it's interesting, uh, when I'm taking picture, uh, myself, it will be uh, bad for me.

✓ I don't have a good camera to take pictures, but I prefer to take pictures of nature because it's interesting; when I take pictures of myself, they usually turn out badly.

The original uses 'camera' without the indefinite article 'a' and the adjective 'enough' is misplaced; 'enough camera' is unnatural. Use 'a good camera' or 'enough cameras' depending on meaning. 'Taking picture' should be plural 'take pictures' or 'taking pictures'; here 'when I take pictures of myself' is correct. Also pronoun/reference: 'it will be bad for me' is vague — replace with 'they usually turn out badly' to refer to photos. Suggestion: include appropriate articles ('a') and match singular/plural forms, and choose clearer vocabulary. Grammar problem type ID:22

× That's why I prefer to take picture.

✓ That's why I prefer to take pictures.

'Picture' should be plural after 'take' when referring to photos in general: 'take pictures'. Alternatively 'to take a picture' for a single photo. Use correct noun form after the verb. Suggestion: use plural when speaking generally about photographing: 'take pictures'. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Maybe it's interesting for everyone.

✓ Maybe it's interesting for many people.

'For everyone' is too absolute and may not match context; 'for many people' is more natural. Also the sentence is short and vague; adding 'many' or specifying who finds it interesting improves clarity. Suggestion: choose quantifiers that match intended meaning. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Actually, I don't have enough enough time to view urban areas.

✓ Actually, I don't have enough time to visit urban areas.

The word 'enough' is duplicated. 'View urban areas' is awkward; native speakers 'visit' or 'see' urban areas. Correct structure: 'don't have enough time to visit'. Suggestion: remove duplicate words and use appropriate verbs like 'visit' or 'see'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I prefer walking in. A park like.

✓ I prefer walking in a park.

The original is fragmented and contains a misplaced period and word order problem. Combine into a single coherent sentence: 'I prefer walking in a park.' Suggestion: avoid unnecessary pauses and ensure subject-verb-object order. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Oh it's an interesting question. I preferred views in other country because I love I love being too into travel.

✓ Oh, that's an interesting question. I prefer sights in other countries because I love traveling.

'Preferred' is past tense but the speaker means a present preference, so use 'prefer'. 'Views in other country' should be 'sights in other countries' or 'views in other countries' (plural). 'I love I love being too into travel' is ungrammatical and awkward; 'I love traveling' is natural. Also remove redundant words. Suggestion: use present tense for current preferences and simpler gerund forms like 'traveling'. Grammar problem type ID:7

× That's why I usually prefer to view other country because they are traditional, they are nature and landscapes are so beautiful.

✓ That's why I usually prefer to visit other countries because they have traditional culture, beautiful nature, and stunning landscapes.

Pronoun and agreement errors: 'other country' should be plural 'other countries' when speaking generally; 'they are traditional' is vague—countries 'have traditional culture'. 'They are nature' is incorrect: countries do not 'are' nature; use 'have beautiful nature'. Also combine ideas with commas for clarity. Suggestion: ensure noun-pronoun agreement and use appropriate verbs ('have') to describe attributes of countries. Grammar problem type ID:12