Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify your main idea with a clear topic sentence, correct word choice, and shorter, coherent sentences. Avoid unrelated words and repetition. Use one or two specific examples and a linking phrase. Also correct grammar (verb forms, articles) and vocabulary (e.g., ‘landscapes’, ‘seaside’, ‘cameras’, ‘sharing’).

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing landscapes because they help me relax. For example, I like taking pictures at the seaside and in forests, where the light and colours are beautiful. I often edit and share my best shots on social media.

제안: Answer directly with a clear preference and give two supporting reasons using linking words. Fix vocabulary and pronunciation errors (e.g., ‘urban’, not ‘abused’), and avoid long unclear fragments. Keep sentences simple and connected.

예시: I prefer urban views. For one thing, I live on the sixth floor of an apartment, so I enjoy looking at skyscrapers from my window. Also, I find the city’s architecture and lights fascinating, especially at night.

제안: State your preference clearly and give specific reasons and an example. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘abroad’, ‘foreign countries’, ‘breathtaking scenery’) and avoid irrelevant references to movies unless explained. Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘for example’.

예시: I prefer views in foreign countries because they often offer landscapes I can't find at home. For example, films like The Lord of the Rings inspired me to visit New Zealand for its dramatic mountains and green valleys, which are very different from the scenery near my city.

× Of course, capturing the landscape view, especially in the gantry side make me relax and camp, and I love cashiering's, different scenes and grannies, forests and sharing on my social media.

✓ Of course. Capturing landscape views, especially on the gantry side, makes me relaxed and calm, and I love capturing different scenes, grainy moments, and forests to share on my social media.

This sentence has multiple errors that match the 'Verb + -ing form', 'Singular and plural issue', 'Third person singular issue', 'Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs', and 'Sentence structure errors'. 'Capturing' as a gerund is fine, but 'landscape view' should be plural 'landscape views' to match the general activity. 'Gantry side' needs the preposition 'on'. The verb must agree with the singular subject: 'makes' not 'make'. 'Relax' should be the adjective 'relaxed' and 'camp' is likely a misspelling of 'calm'. 'Cashiering's' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'capturing' (or 'taking') and should be followed by 'different scenes'. 'Grannies' seems wrong in context; 'grainy moments' or 'grand vistas' may be intended; I used 'grainy moments' as a plausible correction. Finally, reorder to avoid run-on structure and add commas. Suggestion: break long ideas into shorter clauses, ensure subject-verb agreement, use correct prepositions, and choose appropriate nouns/adjectives.

× Uh, I prefer abused in the other area especially I'm like in the six story apartment. So I love to look out my window that I'm from through my window and see the skyscrapers and the metal.

✓ Uh, I prefer suburbs in other areas. Especially, I live in a six-story apartment, so I love to look out my window and see the skyscrapers and the metal structures.

Errors here include incorrect word choice and prepositions ('abused' should be 'suburbs' or 'suburban areas'), inconsistent pronoun and structure. 'In the other area' is awkward; use 'in other areas' or 'in the suburbs'. 'I'm like in the six story apartment' should be 'I live in a six-story apartment'. Remove redundant phrases 'that I'm from through my window'. Use 'look out my window' without extra prepositions. Hyphenate 'six-story'. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary for place (suburbs), use correct prepositions (in/other), correct verb for residence (live), and avoid repetition.

× On once again to in comparison, in comparison with the view in my country and the foreign countries. I would say I love to cash the views in the foreign country, especially when I watch the movies Lord of the Ring, you know, the granny things or the loss of the remake.

✓ Once again, comparing the views in my country and foreign countries, I would say I prefer the views in foreign countries, especially when I watch movies like The Lord of the Rings with their grand landscapes and dramatic scenery.

This sentence contains sentence structure errors, incorrect word choice, and problems with articles and noun phrases. 'On once again to in comparison' is a jumble; 'Once again, comparing' or 'In comparison' is correct. 'The foreign countries' should be 'foreign countries' or 'abroad'. 'I love to cash the views' is incorrect; use 'I prefer' or 'I love seeing the views'. 'Lord of the Ring' should be 'The Lord of the Rings' and 'granny things or the loss of the remake' makes no sense; likely intended 'grand scenery' or 'landscapes' and 'the Lord of the Rings remake' if relevant. Suggestion: simplify comparative phrases, use correct article and film title, and replace incorrect verbs (cash) with appropriate verbs (prefer, enjoy, see). Keep sentences concise and stick to one idea per sentence.