Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Mejorar la precisión y la naturalidad: corrige errores léxicos y gramaticales (por ejemplo, “many essence” no es correcto) y usa frases más naturales y concisas. Mantén la respuesta directa (1-2 oraciones de tema + 1-2 detalles) y evita redundancias. Practica usar collocations comunes como “preserve memories”, “take photos of landmarks/scenery”, y estructuras simples de razón como “because” o “so that”.

예시: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. When I travel, I usually photograph landmarks and local scenery because they help me preserve memories and I like sharing them with my friends and family when I get home.

제안: Mejorar la fluidez y corregir errores formales: evita palabras poco naturales como “wherein” y repeticiones innecesarias. Usa conectores simples (“however”, “but”, “when”) y mantén oraciones más cortas y claras. Añade un ejemplo específico para ser más concreto (por ejemplo, “city skyline at sunset” o “a quiet lake”).

예시: It depends on my mood. If I’m excited, I prefer photographing cityscapes and architecture because the light and movement are inspiring; but when I want to relax, I like shooting peaceful countryside scenes, such as a quiet lake at sunrise.

제안: Mejorar la gramática y la claridad: corrige tiempos verbales y estructura la respuesta con una frase temática clara seguida de una razón específica. Evita repeticiones (“new views” / “new place”) y proporciona un ejemplo concreto. Usa tiempo presente para preferencias actuales: “I prefer”.

예시: I prefer taking photos in other countries because I enjoy discovering new scenery and cultures; for example, I love photographing colorful markets and historic streets when I travel abroad.

× When I travel, I usually take photos of many essence in a new place because they help me preserve memory and I enjoy showing those photos to my friends and family when I return.

✓ When I travel, I usually take photos of many scenes in a new place because they help me preserve memories and I enjoy showing those photos to my friends and family when I return.

The student used 'essence' (uncountable, wrong meaning) instead of 'scenes' (countable) and 'memory' (usually plural here) instead of 'memories'. Use countable nouns with quantifiers like 'many' and use plural 'memories' to refer to multiple recollections. Suggestion: replace 'many essence' with 'many scenes' and 'preserve memory' with 'preserve memories'. Grammar problem type ID: 14

× If I'm excited, I prefer taking photos of the cityscape and the architecture because the light and rhythms are inspiring. But wherein I want to relax, I enjoy the peaceful views on the countryside and wetlands escapes.

✓ If I'm excited, I prefer taking photos of the cityscape and the architecture because the light and rhythms are inspiring. But when I want to relax, I enjoy the peaceful views of the countryside and wetland escapes.

The phrase 'wherein I want to relax' is incorrect; 'when I want to relax' expresses time. Also 'on the countryside' is wrong preposition; use 'of the countryside'. 'wetlands escapes' is awkward: use 'wetland escapes' or 'wetlands' or 'wetland areas'. Suggestion: replace 'wherein' with 'when', use 'of the countryside', and 'wetland escapes' for natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 16

× I think I preferred taking photos in other countries and because I like new views and new place.

✓ I think I prefer taking photos in other countries because I like new views and new places.

The student used 'preferred' (past) which conflicts with the present preference expressed by 'I think' and 'because I like'. Use present simple 'prefer' to indicate a general preference. Also 'and because' is redundant; remove 'and'. 'new place' should be plural 'new places' to match 'new views'. Suggestion: change 'I preferred' to 'I prefer', remove 'and', and use 'new places'. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× For this reason I prefer this option.

✓ For this reason, I prefer that option.

The phrasing 'this option' is vague and the sentence lacks a clear referent; 'that option' or repeating 'preferring other countries' is clearer. Also a comma after the introductory phrase 'For this reason' improves readability. Suggestion: use 'For this reason, I prefer that option' or 'For this reason, I prefer taking photos in other countries.' Grammar problem type ID: 26