Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 语言自然性和表达需要改进：句子有重复和语法错误（例如 “no matter I go out or on a travel on travel”），表达不够简洁。建议练习简洁的主题句并用一到两个支持细节，注意时态和介词用法；并使用更恰当的词汇（如 “capture memories” 而不是 “write more memories”）。可以在回答中加入具体例子（拍摄什么样的场景、用什么设备）。

예시: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. It helps me capture memories and notice small details, like the way light falls on buildings or the colours of a sunset. I also post some of my best shots on Instagram to share moments with friends.

제안: 回答结构不够紧凑且有语法错误或多余信息（“since I am currently living in Taipei City which is the capital of Taiwan” 与问题无直接关系）。建议先直接给出偏好（topic sentence），然后用一至两句具体原因或细节支持，并用连接词衔接。注意主谓一致（e.g. “rural areas feel”）。

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because they often offer unique landscapes and a sense of tranquillity. For instance, I enjoy photographing rolling hills and traditional villages where you can capture natural colours and peaceful scenes.

제안: 内容有逻辑但语言错误多（如 “observe I am attorneys” 不通顺，单复数错误）。部分句子冗长且不够自然。建议先直接回答偏好，再给出一两个具体理由并用连接词，如 because, for example。修正词汇搭配（e.g. “better organized urban planning”, “wider streets and more public spaces”），并减少重复。

예시: I prefer views in other countries because their urban planning is often better organized. For example, many cities have wider streets, more parks and pedestrian zones, which make the city look cleaner and more attractive to photograph.

× I enjoy taking photos of different views no matter I go out or on a travel on travel to foreign nations.

✓ I enjoy taking photos of different views no matter whether I go out or travel to foreign countries.

错误类型：动词+ -ing 形式以及从句连接词使用不当。原句中“no matter I go out or on a travel on travel to foreign nations”结构混乱；应使用“no matter whether”引导让步从句，并把“travel”用作不带介词的不定式或动名词结构。并且“on a travel”不正确，应改为“travel”或“go on a trip”，“foreign nations”更自然为“foreign countries”。建议：使用固定表达“no matter whether I go out or travel to foreign countries”，保持主句动词形式一致。

× It helps me write more memories and notice details.

✓ It helps me record more memories and notice details.

错误类型：介词/动词搭配不当。中文里“写更多的回忆”应为“记录更多的回忆”，英文用“write memories”不自然。应使用“record memories”或“create memories”。建议：把“write”换为更合适的动词如“record”或“capture”。

× Besides, I also like to share my photos on Instagram to update my affairs with friends.

✓ Besides, I also like to share my photos on Instagram to update my friends about what I'm doing.

错误类型：代词/短语使用不当。“update my affairs with friends”表达不自然且语法错误。英语中用“update someone about/on something”更合适。建议改为“update my friends about what I'm doing”或“keep my friends updated”。

× Well, personally since I am currently living in Taipei City which is the capital of Taiwan.

✓ Well, personally, I am currently living in Taipei City, which is the capital of Taiwan.

错误类型：句子结构错误。原句把从属连词“since”与表述当前位置混合，导致句子不完整或结构混乱。应直接陈述主句，然后用定语从句补充信息。建议：去掉“since”或重写为复合句，例如“I am currently living in Taipei City, which is the capital of Taiwan.”

× In fact, I think rural areas feels more unique.

✓ In fact, I think rural areas feel more unique.

错误类型：主谓一致。主语“rural areas”为复数，谓语动词应为复数形式“feel”，而不是“feels”。建议：确认主语单复数后使用相应的动词形式。

× In fact, observe I am attorneys, I prefer the landscapes and city views in other countries because urban planning there is usually better organized.

✓ In fact, to be honest, I am an attorney. I prefer the landscapes and city views in other countries because urban planning there is usually better organized.

错误类型：句子结构和词类使用错误。原句“In fact, observe I am attorneys”不符合英语表达；“observe”用法不当，“attorneys”与主语人称不匹配且缺不定冠词。应拆成两句：声明职业（使用单数或复数与主语一致并加冠词），然后表达偏好。建议：使用“to be honest”或直接“I am an attorney.”并用“I prefer...”连接后句。

× For example, the government often builds wider streets and more public spaces with plenty of plans, which marks the city's cleaner calm and more attractive.

✓ For example, the government often builds wider streets and more public spaces with plenty of green spaces, which makes the city cleaner, calmer, and more attractive.

错误类型：形容词/副词使用不当及语序问题。原句“with plenty of plans”不恰当，应为“plenty of green spaces”或“good planning”；“which marks the city's cleaner calm and more attractive”结构错误且词性混乱，应使用短语“makes the city cleaner, calmer, and more attractive”。建议：用并列形容词并使用合适的名词短语（如“green spaces”或“good planning”）。