Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and grammar, give a concise topic sentence then one or two supporting details. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases (e.g., “Slide 2”, “capture too much”, “when I watch”). Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas and keep to 3–4 sentences max.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing landscapes when I travel because photos help me remember special moments and scenery. I usually share the best shots with friends on social media, so they can see places I visit.

제안: Be specific and correct vocabulary. Start with a clear preference, then give 1–2 concrete reasons and an example. Avoid incorrect words (e.g., “rules”, “financial beauties”, “movement”) and long unclear clauses. Use linking words such as “however”, “because” or “for example”.

예시: I generally prefer rural views because I love photographing natural landscapes like mountains and lakes. However, I also enjoy urban scenes for interesting architecture and street life. For example, last year I photographed a mountain sunrise that looked great on my social feed.

제안: Give a direct answer first (yes/no or both) and then support with a clear reason and a specific example. Fix sentence structure and tense errors (e.g., “I'm Canada has been three years”). Keep responses to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like “also” or “for instance”.

예시: I don’t have a strong preference — I enjoy views in both my own country and abroad. Each place has unique scenery, so I try to photograph interesting landscapes wherever I travel; for instance, since moving to Canada three years ago I’ve been exploring and photographing local parks and coastal areas.

× Slide 2 I like to capture too much when I watch, when I like to travel, I love to take photos and share with on social media with friends.

✓ I like to take a lot of photos when I travel and share them with my friends on social media.

The original sentence has awkward structure and redundant phrases. 'Capture too much when I watch' is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Share with on social media with friends' has incorrect word order and missing object pronoun. The correction organizes ideas logically: subject + verb + object, uses 'a lot of photos' for quantity, 'when I travel' as the time clause, and 'share them with my friends on social media' with correct pronoun and preposition usage. Suggested improvement: simplify ideas into clear clauses, ensure each verb has a correct object, and place prepositional phrases after the verb object.

× It has been to remember those moments and revisit there if I want to.

✓ They help me remember those moments and revisit them if I want to.

The original uses 'It has been to remember' which is incorrect verb form and subject reference. Use a plural subject 'They' to refer to photos and the verb 'help' with the base form 'remember'. 'Revisit there' misuses 'there' as object; use 'them' to refer to the moments. Suggested improvement: ensure subject correctly matches the noun it replaces and use appropriate verb patterns (help + base verb).

× So definitely like to take pictures.

✓ So I definitely like to take pictures.

The sentence lacks an explicit subject. Adding the subject 'I' fixes sentence structure and subject-verb agreement. Always include the subject unless context clearly allows its omission in informal speech.

× Sometimes even in the rules it has lots of views or landscape which I like to capture.

✓ Sometimes even in the rural areas there are lots of views or landscapes that I like to capture.

'Rules' is a mistaken word for 'rural', and 'in the rules' is incorrect. The construction 'it has lots of views' is awkward; use 'there are lots of views'. 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to match 'lots of'. Also use 'that' to introduce the relative clause. Suggested improvement: choose correct vocabulary ('rural'), use 'there is/are' for existence, and match plural nouns with quantifiers.

× But I mostly like to take photos of the landscape with the mountains, financial beauties because I feel comfortable like having those kind of captions, those kind of movement and selling on social media to showing people like what the natural.

✓ But I mostly like to take photos of landscapes with mountains and natural beauty because I feel comfortable posting those kinds of captions and moments on social media to show people the natural scenery.

The original contains wrong vocabulary ('financial beauties'), incorrect noun forms ('those kind of' should be 'those kinds of' or 'that kind of'), and incorrect gerund or infinitive forms ('selling on social media to showing' is wrong). 'What the natural' is incomplete. The correction replaces incorrect words with 'natural beauty' and fixes pluralization and verb forms. Suggested improvement: use correct collocations (natural beauty, post/share), ensure noun and verb forms agree, and keep parallel structure in lists.

× Different like every country or this they have their own beauty and landscapes.

✓ Each country is different; they have their own beauty and landscapes.

The original word order is incorrect and uses 'Different like' awkwardly. 'This' is misplaced. The correction clarifies the subject 'each country' and uses 'they' to refer back correctly. Suggested improvement: use clear subjects and pronouns and use semicolons or separate sentences to connect related ideas.

× So if I'm travelling somewhere, even in my own country is the places have a beautiful landscapes.

✓ So if I'm travelling somewhere, even in my own country there are places with beautiful landscapes.

The original mixes clauses improperly and contains 'is the places have' which is ungrammatical. Use 'there are' to indicate existence and 'places with beautiful landscapes' for correct noun phrase. Also 'landscapes' should be plural. Suggested improvement: use 'there is/are' for existence and ensure subject-verb order is correct.

× I try to capture those moment.

✓ I try to capture those moments.

'Moment' should be plural 'moments' to match 'those'. The verb phrase 'try to capture' is correct. Suggested improvement: match demonstratives ('those') with plural nouns.

× I like to explore different places even in my country and other country as well.

✓ I like to explore different places in my country and in other countries as well.

The original omits required prepositions and mixes singular/plural: 'other country' should be 'other countries' or 'another country', and 'in' should be before both 'my country' and 'other countries'. Suggested improvement: ensure consistent preposition placement and correct number for nouns when referring broadly.

× So I'm Canada has been three years and I'm now I'm exploring more places.

✓ I have been in Canada for three years, and now I'm exploring more places.

The original lacks proper subject-verb structure: 'So I'm Canada has been three years' is ungrammatical. Use present perfect 'have been in Canada for three years' to indicate duration up to now. Remove the extra 'I'm'. Suggested improvement: use 'have been in [place] for [duration]' to express how long you've lived somewhere and avoid repeating subjects unnecessarily.