Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid filler words (e.g., “umm”). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct small grammar issues (use singular/plural consistently and add commas).

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially sunsets and flowers. For example, I often take photos of colourful sunsets and cloud formations, save them on my phone, and change my wallpaper every few days.

제안: Begin with a clear direct answer and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to explain reasons and give one concrete example. Fix phrasing errors (e.g., “take pictures in rural areas”).

예시: I prefer rural views because they offer natural scenery like fields, trees and wildlife. For example, last summer I photographed a meadow with grazing sheep and a line of old oak trees, which felt more peaceful than city scenes.

제안: Give a direct answer first (Yes or No) and then support it with clear, specific reasons. Avoid unclear words (“writers”) and incomplete sentences. Use linking phrases (for example, moreover, additionally) and provide one concrete example of a type of view in your country.

예시: Yes, I prefer views in my country because it has diverse landscapes. For example, we have coastal cliffs, snowy mountain areas and wide grass fields, so I can photograph beaches one month and snow-covered peaks the next.

× Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views such as sunset, beautiful flowers, umm rainbows and beautiful clouds.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views such as sunsets, beautiful flowers, rainbows, and clouds.

Plural forms are needed for general categories (sunsets, rainbows, clouds). This error falls under verb + -ing context because 'taking' is correct but surrounding nouns need pluralization to sound natural. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to types or examples in general.

× I have a lot of pictures in my phone I usually set up on wallpaper.

✓ I have a lot of pictures on my phone; I usually set one as my wallpaper.

Use of preposition and article is incorrect: 'in my phone' should be 'on my phone'. Also 'set up on wallpaper' is awkward; 'set one as my wallpaper' is correct. This is an article/preposition and sentence structure issue; ensure correct preposition for digital devices ('on my phone') and include an article ('a' or 'my') before 'wallpaper'.

× I usually change them on on different days.

✓ I usually change them on different days.

Repeated word 'on' is a typographical/repetition error and breaks sentence fluency. Remove the duplicate preposition. Maintain 'on different days' to indicate frequency.

× Well, in my opinion, rural areas have more views than in urban areas.

✓ Well, in my opinion, rural areas have more scenic views than urban areas.

Comparative structure is awkward: 'more views than in urban areas' is redundant. Use direct comparison 'more... than' with parallel nouns. Also add 'scenic' for clarity. Present tense is fine but phrasing improved.

× There are a lot of views of fields, grass, trees and animals in rural areas.

✓ There are many views of fields, grass, trees, and animals in rural areas.

'A lot of' is informal; 'many' fits countable nouns. Also add comma before 'and' for clarity. Structure is acceptable otherwise.

× So I would prefer to take picture on rural in rural areas on the other side in.

✓ So I would prefer to take pictures in rural areas.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and redundant. Use plural 'pictures' and preposition 'in rural areas'. Remove extraneous fragments like 'on the other side in.' Keep concise.

× Will I prefer views in my country?

✓ Do I prefer views in my country?

'Will I prefer' asks about the future; the question intends to ask current preference, so use present simple 'Do I prefer'. Use correct auxiliary for present questions.

× Because there are a lot of writers in my country to take a picture such as grass fields.

✓ Because there are a lot of places in my country to take pictures, such as grass fields.

'Writers' is incorrect word choice; context requires 'places'. Also 'to take a picture' should be plural 'to take pictures' or 'a picture' with article. Fix pronoun/word choice and pluralization.

× There are also states where snow falls.

✓ There are also areas where snow falls.

'States' may be acceptable but sounds odd; 'areas' or 'regions' fits better. Present simple 'fall' is fine to describe habitual weather. This is more lexical choice than tense; keep present tense for general facts.

× So in other countries maybe there are less views but in my country there are lot of varieties such as mountains, fields, clouds and also on.

✓ So in other countries there may be fewer scenic views, but in my country there are many varieties such as mountains, fields, and clouds.

Use 'fewer' for countable nouns, not 'less'. 'There are lot of' should be 'there are a lot of' or 'there are many'. Remove trailing 'and also on' which is incomplete. Maintain present tense for general statements.