Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, accuracy and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and avoid redundancy. Add one or two specific details about what kinds of views you like and why, using a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I like photographing coastal sunsets because the colors are dramatic and change quickly, so I can practice timing my shots; also, when I share them on social media, my friends often comment, which motivates me to keep improving.

제안: Expand your answer with a brief reason and a linking word. Give one concrete detail about what you like in urban views to make the answer more informative and natural.

예시: I prefer urban areas because I enjoy the variety of architecture and city lights; for instance, I like photographing skyscrapers and busy streets at night since the contrast and movement create interesting compositions.

제안: Correct vocabulary and grammar, and avoid negative or vague comments about your country. State your preference clearly, give a polite comparative reason, and include a specific example of a place and why you like it. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep within a couple of sentences.

예시: I prefer views in other countries, mainly because I enjoy seeing different styles and cultures; for example, I love Tokyo for its futuristic skyline and neat street scenes, and I hope to work there someday so I can explore and photograph the city more often.

× Yeah, I like to taking picture in different views because it seems good to see and so many people like to see it.

✓ Yeah, I like taking pictures of different views because they look good, and many people like to see them.

The verb 'like' is followed by the gerund form 'taking' (not 'to taking'). 'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match 'different views'. Use the preposition 'of' with 'pictures of views'. Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer back to 'pictures' and plural verb 'look'. Remove redundant 'so' and simplify 'so many people like to see it' to 'many people like to see them'.

× So when I post in social media, many people likes it.

✓ So when I post on social media, many people like it.

Use the preposition 'on' for 'post on social media'. 'Many people' is plural, so the verb should be 'like' (not 'likes'). Retain 'it' only if referring to a singular item; better to specify 'my photos' if clearer.

× So when I post in social media, many people likes it.

✓ So when I post on social media, many people like it.

The correct preposition is 'on social media' rather than 'in social media'. This is standard collocation in English.

× I prefer a fuse in another country because my country is not too good.

✓ I prefer to live in another country because my country is not very good.

The original uses 'a fuse' which is incorrect; likely intended 'to live'. Use the infinitive 'to live' after 'prefer' when comparing general preferences. 'Not too good' is colloquial; 'not very good' is clearer. Ensure sentence expresses the idea of living abroad.

× My country is Indonesia and I like the few in Tokyo because Tokyo is a city that I want to leave when I work someday.

✓ My country is Indonesia, and I like the view in Tokyo because Tokyo is a city where I want to live and work someday.

'I like the few' is incorrect; likely 'view' was intended. Use 'the view in Tokyo' or 'views of Tokyo'. 'A city that I want to leave when I work' is opposite meaning; use 'a city where I want to live and work someday'. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses.