Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Correggi errori di riferimento e migliora la chiarezza. Evita frasi ridondanti e usa parole più precise. Per esempio, non dire “photographs of you” se intendevi paesaggi; dì semplicemente “landscapes” o “scenes”. Mantieni la risposta entro 3–4 frasi e usa collegamenti semplici come “because” o “so” per spiegare il motivo. Aggiungi un dettaglio concreto (es. il tipo di scena che preferisci) per essere più specifico.

예시: Yes, I love taking pictures of landscapes and city scenes. I always carry my camera because I enjoy capturing new cities and natural views. For example, I like photographing sunsets over rivers when I travel with friends.

제안: Completa le frasi interrotte e organizza meglio le idee. Inizia con un’affermazione chiara, poi usa un collegamento come “because” per spiegare la preferenza per ciascun tipo di paesaggio. Fornisci un esempio specifico di ciò che ti attira in città e in campagna per rendere la risposta più ricca e naturale.

예시: I enjoy both urban and rural views. In cities I like watching everyday life because the streets are lively and full of interesting scenes. In the countryside I appreciate peaceful landscapes and farms, for example wide fields at sunrise.

제안: Rendi la frase più scorrevole e correggi la grammatica e i tempi verbali. Evita esitazioni come “UH” e usa collegamenti come “but” e “although” per contrastare idee. Specifica cosa confronti (es. architettura, natura, culture) per mostrare concretezza.

예시: I enjoy the views in my own country because I’m familiar with them, but I also like visiting other countries to see different architecture and landscapes. For example, comparing local markets at home with markets abroad helps me understand cultural differences.

× Yes, I really love to take photographs of you and then I bring with me a camera of mine because I love to take pictures of a new city, new landscape or when I stay with my friends.

✓ Yes, I really love taking photographs, so I always bring a camera with me because I love taking pictures of a new city, new landscapes, or when I am with my friends.

The error: using the infinitive 'to take' where the gerund 'taking' is natural after 'love'. Use 'bring a camera with me' instead of 'bring with me a camera of mine' for correct word order and idiomatic expression. Use plural 'landscapes' for general reference and present continuous 'am with' for the situation. Suggestion: after verbs of preference (love, like, enjoy) use the -ing form for actions: 'love taking'. Use natural word order: 'bring a camera with me'.

× I like both rural and urban views. In the cities I love to see daily living people and because I think that it's interesting and in the countryside I.

✓ I like both rural and urban views. In the cities I love to see people in their daily lives because I think it's interesting, and in the countryside I prefer quieter, more natural scenes.

The original has sentence fragments and awkward structure ('daily living people' and unfinished clause 'and in the countryside I.'). Fix by turning 'daily living people' into 'people in their daily lives' and complete the contrasting clause for countryside. Suggestion: ensure each sentence is complete with subject and verb and use clear phrases like 'prefer quieter, more natural scenes'.

× I really like the views of my country, but I really liked to visit new city, new landscape, new culture over other countries because UH is interesting to compare mine to their.

✓ I really like the views of my country, but I also really like visiting new cities, landscapes, and cultures in other countries because it is interesting to compare mine to theirs.

Errors include inconsistent tense ('like' vs 'liked' — use present for general preference), wrong verb form 'to visit' after 'like' should be gerund 'visiting' or keep 'really like to visit' consistently, missing plurals ('city'->'cities'), and incorrect pronoun 'their' and clumsy 'UH'. Use 'it is' instead of 'UH'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for habitual preferences, use gerund after 'like' or consistent infinitive, plural nouns for general categories, and possessive pronoun 'theirs' to compare.