Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장 구조와 문법을 다듬고, 아이디어를 더 명확히 표현하세요. 주제 문장으로 직접 대답한 뒤, 연결어로 이유와 구체적 예를 덧붙이세요. 예: 'Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views.'라고 시작하고, 시제와 관사를 고치며 'for instance' 대신 'for example'나 'such as'를 사용해 구체적인 상황을 설명하세요.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, the same landscape can look completely different at sunrise and sunset, so I like capturing those changing colors and moods.

제안: 불필요한 단어(VOC)를 제거하고 문법(관사, 수일치)을 고치며 논리적으로 연결하세요. 주제 문장으로 선호를 명확히 밝힌 뒤, 'because'로 이유를 간결히 제시하고 구체적 묘사를 추가하세요.

예시: I prefer rural areas because I live in Seoul, which has many tall buildings and heavy traffic. Therefore, I enjoy the peace and wide open landscapes of the countryside.

제안: 표현을 더 자연스럽게 바꾸고 'other countries'처럼 복수형을 사용하세요. 주제에 대한 명확한 문장 후 이유를 구체적으로 설명하고 예를 더 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 'for instance' 뒤의 예는 소문자와 소유격 사용에 유의하세요.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because landscapes can reveal a lot about a place. For instance, the architecture and street scenes often show local culture and people's daily lives.

× Yes, I really like taking picture of different views.

✓ Yes, I really like taking pictures of different views.

The noun 'picture' should be plural because 'different views' implies multiple instances; use 'pictures'. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to more than one item (e.g., 'taking pictures of different scenes').

× For instance I when I saw same landscape but the view is very different depends on time.

✓ For instance, when I see the same landscape, the view can be very different depending on the time of day.

This sentence has multiple structure issues: misplaced 'I', missing articles, incorrect verb tense and word order. Use 'when I see' for general habit (present simple), add 'the' before 'same landscape', 'depending on' is the correct prepositional phrase, and specify 'time of day'. Suggestion: simplify and reorder clauses: 'For instance, when I see the same landscape, the view can be very different depending on the time of day.'

× I prefer VOC rural area because I live in Seoul which city have tall buildings and heavy traffic so I like nature and wide landscape.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I live in Seoul, which has tall buildings and heavy traffic, so I like nature and wide landscapes.

Problems: 'VOC' is unnecessary, 'rural area' should be plural to match general preference, 'which city have' is incorrect — use 'which has' (subject-verb agreement), and 'wide landscape' should be 'wide landscapes' to match plural context. Suggestion: remove stray tokens, ensure subject-verb agreement, and match singular/plural forms ('rural areas', 'has', 'wide landscapes').

× I prefer looking on other country umm because landscape views tell many things.

✓ I prefer looking at other countries because landscape views tell many things.

Use 'looking at' not 'looking on' and 'other countries' should be plural to indicate general preference. Also add an article or plural noun for clarity. Suggestion: use 'look at' with objects, and use plural 'countries' for general statements.

× For instance, their culture or People's Daily life.

✓ For instance, their culture or people's daily life.

Capitalization and article usage: 'People's daily life' should be lowercase 'people's daily life' and 'daily life' is fine as a noun phrase. Also consider pluralizing to 'people's daily lives' when referring to multiple individuals. Suggestion: use 'people's daily lives' to emphasize many individuals' routines and keep consistent capitalization.