Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify vocabulary and pronunciation, use a clear topic sentence, avoid invented words and reduce minor grammar errors. Give one coherent reason with a linking word and a specific detail. Aim for 3–4 sentences total.

예시: Yes — I really enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph mountains because their scale reminds me how small I am compared to nature. I also like how changing light can highlight textures and colours, so I try to take photos at sunrise or sunset to capture dramatic scenes.

제안: Structure the answer with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and finish the sentence. Use accurate articles and tense.

예시: I prefer rural views to urban ones because I grew up in the countryside. For instance, rural areas offer unspoilt landscapes and traditional cultural scenes, which help me feel connected to my roots. Therefore, I often visit villages to take photos of everyday rural life.

제안: Start with a direct statement of preference, correct grammar and specific place names, and give one concrete example comparing home with abroad using linking words. Avoid vague or incorrect terms and be concise.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because it offers a unique combination of high mountains and diverse landscapes. For example, we have parts of the Himalayan range and dramatic foothills that are different from what I see abroad. Nevertheless, I enjoy visiting other countries to experience different cultural landscapes as well.

× I like pacificating from different view of the world.

✓ I like photographing different views of the world.

The student used 'pacificating' which is not a correct verb; the intended verb is 'photograph' and here the gerund 'photographing' is required after 'like'. Also 'view' should be plural 'views' to match 'different'. Suggestion: use common verbs correctly and ensure gerund form after 'like'.

× For intense I love to take picture of the mountains because it reminds me about how small I am and how vast the world is.

✓ For instance, I love to take pictures of the mountains because they remind me how small I am and how vast the world is.

Multiple issues: 'For intense' should be 'For instance' (word choice). 'take picture' needs plural 'pictures' or 'a picture' depending on meaning. 'the mountains' is correct but the verb must agree with plural subject: 'they remind' not 'it reminds'. Also 'remind me how' is more natural than 'reminds me about how'. Suggest using 'For instance' and ensure subject-verb agreement and plural forms.'

× As as I as long as I live in urban area, I really enjoy the rural area because I am from the rural area and rural area really gives the natural view, natural culture and natural values, which helps to keep me in that tradition and.

✓ As long as I live in an urban area, I still really enjoy rural areas because I am from a rural area and rural places offer natural scenery, culture, and values that help me stay connected to my traditions.

Problems: duplicate words 'As as I as', missing articles 'an urban area', inconsistent singular/plural 'rural area' vs 'rural areas', awkward phrasing 'gives the natural view' should be 'offer natural scenery'. The final clause was incomplete 'and.' Fix sentence structure, use consistent articles and pluralization, and complete the idea. Use 'stay connected to my traditions' for clarity.'

× My country have all the tree trees and hilly mountain in Torah.

✓ My country has all the trees and hilly mountains in total.

Subject 'My country' is singular, so use 'has' not 'have' (subject-verb agreement). 'tree trees' is a repetition; use 'trees'. 'hilly mountain' should be plural 'hilly mountains' or 'hilly terrain'. 'in Torah' is unclear; possibly intended 'in total' or a place name—clarify. Suggest: 'My country has many trees and hilly mountains.'

× I like the view of my own country because we get all the view of Mount Everest, the Himalayan rims and the salarism.

✓ I like the views of my own country because we can see Mount Everest, the Himalayan ranges, and the salt flats.

Use plural 'views' to match general preference. 'we get all the view of' is unnatural; use 'we can see'. 'Himalayan rims' is incorrect — 'Himalayan ranges' or 'Himalayas' is correct. 'salarism' is not an English noun; likely 'salt flats' (salares) is intended. Fix word choices and article usage.'

× For sure the other country has also good but my country have a different perspective of views.

✓ Other countries are also beautiful, but my country has a different perspective on views.

'the other country has also good' is ungrammatical — use 'Other countries are also beautiful' or 'Other countries also have beautiful views'. 'my country have' again needs 'has' for singular subject. 'a different perspective of views' should be 'a different perspective on views' or 'a different kind of scenery'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct preposition use.