Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and cohesive by using full sentences and linking ideas. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words (for example, “especially” or “such as”) and avoid sentence fragments.

예시: Yes, I do enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing natural scenes, such as landscapes, trees, gardens and flowers, because I find the colours and shapes calming.

제안: Correct grammar errors and combine fragments into a concise answer. Use linking words to explain reasons (for example, “because” and “so”) and include one specific example to make your answer concrete.

예시: I prefer rural views because I love nature and bright sunlight, which you see more in the countryside. For example, I enjoy watching birds and farm animals while walking along country paths.

제안: Give a clearer direct answer first, then explain with a specific reason and an example. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect word order; use linking words like “however” or “for example” to clarify when your preference changes.

예시: It depends — sometimes I prefer views in my own country because I know the best spots and can visit them easily. However, I also enjoy views in other countries when I travel, for example, visiting coastal cliffs or famous parks I cannot find at home.

× Of beautiful landscape or nature, trees, gardens, flowers.

✓ I like beautiful landscapes, nature, trees, gardens, and flowers.

The original fragment is sentence-incomplete and lists nouns without a clear subject or verb; this is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Combine the items into a complete sentence with a subject and verb that match the previous sentence: 'I like' was implied. Use plural 'landscapes' to match general sense and include conjunction 'and' before the final item for correct list punctuation. Improve by forming full sentences rather than fragments.

× I enjoy.

✓ I enjoy them.

The original 'I enjoy.' is incomplete because 'enjoy' is a transitive verb that normally requires an object; this is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Add the object 'them' referring to the pictures or views mentioned earlier, or rephrase as 'I enjoy taking pictures' to be explicit. Ensure verbs that require objects are followed by appropriate noun phrases.

× Absolutely, I prefer views in a rural areas because I love nature and the sunlight.

✓ Absolutely, I prefer views in rural areas because I love nature and the sunlight.

Using the article 'a' with the plural noun 'areas' is incorrect; this is an article error (ID 22). Remove 'a' so the noun phrase correctly reads 'rural areas'. Alternatively, use singular: 'in a rural area.' Ensure article choice matches singular/plural noun forms.

× The fresh airs and animals.

✓ The fresh air and the animals.

'Airs' is not used in this context; use the uncountable noun 'air' (singular) to refer to fresh atmosphere. Also include an article 'the' before 'animals' for clarity. This is a singular/plural and countability issue (ID 1). Use correct countable/uncountable forms and appropriate articles.

× It depends on what I want to see in my country.

✓ It depends on what I want to see in a country or in my country.

The original sentence is grammatical but slightly ambiguous in context because the examiner asked to compare own country vs other countries; to be clearer, mention both options. This is a sentence-structure/clarity suggestion (ID 26). Rephrase to explicitly address the comparison: 'It depends on what I want to see in my country or in another country.'

× There are several places that I enjoy seeing them when I walk.

✓ There are several places that I enjoy seeing when I walk.

The original sentence incorrectly includes the pronoun 'them' together with the relative clause 'that I enjoy seeing,' causing redundancy; this is an incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12). Remove 'them' because 'that' already refers to 'places.' Keep only one object in the clause: 'places that I enjoy seeing.' Also ensure tense and structure remain consistent.