Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Réduisez les erreurs grammaticales et améliorez la fluidité en utilisant des phrases complètes et une structure claire. Par exemple, évitez les confusions nominales (« building vegetation ») et accordez les verbes et les articles. Ajoutez un lien logique entre l'idée principale et l'explication en utilisant des connecteurs simples (e.g. « because », « so »). Enfin, variez un peu le vocabulaire spécifique au sujet (e.g. « architecture », « wildlife », «landscapes»).

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing scenic views, such as architecture, greenery and birds, because it helps me learn about different places. For example, when I photograph a city's buildings and parks, I notice details of the architecture and local plants. This allows others to discover those locations through my photos.

제안: Améliorez la précision et éliminez les répétitions. Évitez les hésitations (« I I ») et les connecteurs inappropriés (« furthermore »). Organisez la réponse : une phrase d'opinion claire, puis 1–2 phrases de soutien avec des détails concrets et des connecteurs (« because », « for example »). Corrigez la grammaire (pluriels, accords, formes verbales).

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because I find them more varied and visually interesting. For example, cities combine modern buildings, small parks with wildlife and interesting street scenes. Because of this variety, I can take diverse photos that highlight architecture and city life.

제안: Corrigez la répétition d'idées et la redondance (« because » répété) et améliorez la clarté. Formulez une opinion claire suivie de raisons spécifiques et d'exemples concrets. Utilisez des phrases plus courtes et correctes (accords, prépositions) et remplacez mots vagues (« packs ») par le mot correct (« parks »).

예시: I prefer photographing views in my own country because I know the places well and can find beautiful natural spots easily. For example, we have wide grass fields, lush vegetation and new infrastructure, so I can quickly discover interesting locations and capture them in different seasons.

× Yes, I enjoy photographing scenic views such as building vegetation and birds.

✓ Yes, I enjoy photographing scenic views such as buildings, vegetation, and birds.

The sentence lists nouns; 'building' should be plural 'buildings' (singular/plural issue) and items in a list need commas. Use plural for countable items and separate list items with commas. Also keep parallel noun forms. Suggestion: ensure each item is correct noun form and parallel ('buildings, vegetation, and birds').

× It helps me learn more about different places and let other discover those location through my photos.

✓ It helps me learn more about different places and lets others discover those locations through my photos.

After 'It helps me... and' the verbs must agree with singular subject 'it' so use 'lets'. 'Other' should be plural 'others' and 'location' should be plural 'locations' to match 'those'. Also maintain parallel verb forms. Suggestion: match subject-verb number and pluralize nouns when using demonstratives like 'those'.

× I I furthermore prefer views in urban area because it is more attractive and more beautiful.

✓ I furthermore prefer views in urban areas because they are more attractive and more beautiful.

Use plural 'areas' when speaking generally about urban areas. 'It' is incorrect for plural 'views' or 'areas'; use 'they are'. Remove duplicate 'I'. Suggestion: avoid repeated words and ensure subject and verb agree in number.

× Like we can talk about them green vegetation, some parks found with animals and new infrastructure build in the urban areas.

✓ For example, we can talk about the green vegetation, parks with animals, and new infrastructure built in urban areas.

Sentence begins with informal 'Like'—use 'For example'. 'Them' is unnecessary before 'green vegetation'. 'Some parks found with animals' is ungrammatical; use 'parks with animals'. 'Build' should be past participle 'built' to describe existing infrastructure. Suggestion: use proper introductory phrase, correct noun phrases, and past participle for completed actions.

× So for me I think urban areas have more views and I can highlight those.

✓ So for me, I think urban areas have more sights and I can highlight them.

'Views' can be replaced by 'sights' which is more natural here but not strictly necessary; primary issue is pronoun 'those' should be 'them' to refer back to 'sights'. Add a comma after introductory phrase. Suggestion: use natural collocations and correct pronoun referencing.

× I prefer views in my country because my country is the most beautiful country in the world because of our vegetation, our because of our grass field, our new infrastructures and packs found in our country.

✓ I prefer views in my country because it is the most beautiful country in the world because of our vegetation, grass fields, new infrastructure, and parks found in our country.

Redundant 'my country' repeated; replace second with 'it'. Remove extra 'because of our'. Use plural 'grass fields' and 'parks' (not 'packs'). 'Infrastructure' is usually uncountable, so use singular. Suggestion: avoid repetition, correct word choice ('parks') and pluralization, and use uncountable nouns appropriately.

× So it's very easier for us to to discover new places, new environment and through photographic.

✓ So it's much easier for us to discover new places and new environments through photography.

'Very easier' is incorrect; use 'much easier' or 'a lot easier'. Remove duplicate 'to'. 'New environment' should be plural 'new environments' or 'a new environment' depending on meaning. 'Through photographic' is wrong; use the noun 'photography'. Suggestion: use correct degree modifiers, avoid duplicate words, and use correct noun forms ('photography').