Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 答えは肯定的で理由も述べていますが、文法や語彙の誤用があり、表現が不自然です。会話の冒頭で明確なトピックセンテンスを作り、続けて具体的な詳細（どのような場所か、どの機会に撮るか、写真が何を呼び起こすか）を2〜3文で補足してください。接続語（for example, because, when）を使って論理的につなげ、曖昧な語（"recommend", "forgettable days"）は正しい語に置き換えましょう。発音や流暢さを向上させるために短くはっきりした文を心がけてください。

예시: Yes, I do. I often take photos of rivers and mountains because I find natural landscapes very calming. For example, when I visit a lake or a mountain trail I try to capture the light and atmosphere, which later reminds me of that peaceful day.

제안: 回答の意図は伝わりますが、文法が崩れており混乱を招きます。まず明確なトピックセンテンス（I prefer...）を述べ、その後に理由を1〜2文で述べてください。接続語（because, although, so）を使い、不要な語や詰まり（uh, so）を減らしましょう。具体性を高めるために、都市と田舎のどの特徴が好みか（静けさ、景色、建物）を挙げてください。

예시: I prefer rural areas. Because I live in a busy city, I enjoy the peace and wide views of the countryside, like fields and small villages, rather than motorways and tall buildings.

제안: 意見は示されていますが、文法と語順が不正確で、詳細が曖昧です。まず直接に答え（I prefer...）を言い、その理由を述べ、具体的な例（どの場所の何が好きか）を付け加えてください。接続語（for example, especially）を使い、'features' のような不完全な表現ではなく具体的な特徴（historic architecture, cobblestone streets, piazzas）を挙げましょう。

예시: I prefer views in other countries, especially Italy. For example, I love Rome because of its historic architecture, narrow cobblestone streets and lively piazzas, which feel very different from my home country.

× Actually, yes, I usually take photos of the beautiful sceneries like river or mountains and whenever I recommend I remember the forgettable days.

✓ Actually, yes. I usually take photos of beautiful scenery like rivers or mountains, and whenever I look back, I remember unforgettable days.

The word 'sceneries' is uncountable in this context; use 'scenery' or plural 'scenes'. 'River' and 'mountains' need parallel plural forms: 'rivers or mountains'. 'Recommend' is incorrect verb — likely intended 'remember' or 'look back' so I replaced with 'look back'. 'Forgettable' means easy to forget; context requires 'unforgettable'. Also adjusted punctuation and conjunctions for clarity. Suggestions: use 'scenery' for general landscapes, match plural forms, choose verbs that convey intended meaning (e.g., 'look back' or 'remember'), and use 'unforgettable' when something is impossible to forget.

× I like the rural areas scenery that doesn't urban areas from cause uh I live in the urban city so I usually look at the motorways and the high buildings so.

✓ I like rural scenery more than urban areas because I live in the city, so I usually see motorways and tall buildings.

The original sentence has confused structure and incorrect connectors. 'Rural areas scenery' should be 'rural scenery' or 'the scenery in rural areas'. 'That doesn't urban areas from cause' is ungrammatical; intended comparison 'more than urban areas' so I used 'more than'. 'Urban city' is redundant; use 'the city'. 'Look at the motorways and the high buildings' was awkward—'see motorways and tall buildings' is natural. Suggestions: form a clear comparison 'X more than Y', avoid redundant words, and use concise verbs like 'see'.

× I like this from my countries but I prefer the other countries views, especially in Italy. I love the scenery of Rome where it features.

✓ I like the views in my country, but I prefer the views in other countries, especially Italy. I love Rome's scenery.

'My countries' is incorrect; use 'my country' (assuming one country). 'Other countries views' needs possessive or 'the views in other countries'. 'Where it features' is ungrammatical and unnecessary; 'Rome's scenery' is concise and correct. Present tense 'like' and 'prefer' are fine but noun phrases needed correction. Suggestions: use correct possessive forms (Rome's), use 'views in...' for clarity, and avoid redundant clauses.