Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be grammatically accurate, concise, and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, I do."), then add one or two clear supporting reasons using correct verb forms and articles. Use linking words to connect ideas, avoid redundancy, and keep the whole answer to no more than 2–3 sentences. For example, say "Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me capture memorable moments and appreciate scenery more closely."

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me capture memorable moments and appreciate scenery more closely.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating preference and follow with specific reasons. Use correct tense and articles (e.g., "I prefer rural areas"). Add one or two concrete details and a linking word such as "because". Avoid filler words like "um" and unclear words like "debut." Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

예시: I prefer rural areas because they are full of green trees and clean rivers, which create a peaceful atmosphere for photography.

제안: Answer directly and clearly: state your preference, then give specific reasons. Remove hesitations and incorrect phrases. Use correct grammar and precise vocabulary (e.g., "My country, Myanmar, has lush forests and beautiful landscapes"). Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "because" or "because of" to connect reasons.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because Myanmar has lush forests and stunning landscapes, so I can find unique scenery and strong cultural context close to home.

× Yes, I'm and I'm taking pictures of different views because photography help me catch a memorable moments and appreciation scenery more closely.

✓ Yes, I am. I take pictures of different views because photography helps me capture memorable moments and appreciate scenery more closely.

Multiple pronoun and verb issues: 'I'm and I'm' is incorrect; use 'I am' or 'I'm' once. 'Photography help' uses incorrect verb form for third-person singular; change to 'photography helps'. 'Catch a memorable moments' mixes verbs and articles and plurality: use 'capture memorable moments' (no article 'a' with plural 'moments' and 'capture' is more natural). 'Appreciation scenery' is incorrect form; use verb 'appreciate' followed by 'scenery'. Improvements: use one clear subject phrase, ensure subject-verb agreement for third-person singular, match singular/plural nouns and choose correct verb forms.

× Umm, I was preferred a debut in rural areas because it's covered with a green tree and a fresh river. Yes.

✓ Umm, I preferred a debut in rural areas because it is covered with green trees and has a fresh river.

'I was preferred' incorrectly uses passive/continuous past; the intended meaning is past simple preference: use 'I preferred'. 'A debut' is incorrect word choice (debut means first appearance); likely 'a debut' should be omitted or replaced — here kept as omitted. 'It's covered with a green tree' has article and singular/plural mismatch: use 'green trees'. Also use 'has a fresh river' or 'has a clear river' to say the area contains a river. Improvements: use simple past for past preference, correct noun choices, and match singular/plural and article usage.

× I move for a far debut in my country, uh, because in my country, Myanmar, uh, is it surrounded by the green fro forest? Umm, it is also called the Greenland and the Golden Land.

✓ I travel to distant places in my country, uh, because Myanmar is surrounded by green forests. It is also called the 'Golden Land'.

Several tense, word choice, and sentence structure errors: 'I move for a far debut' is ungrammatical and unclear; use 'I travel to distant places' to express going to far locations. 'In my country, Myanmar, uh, is it surrounded by the green fro forest?' has incorrect word order and question form; use the declarative 'Myanmar is surrounded by green forests.' 'Green fro forest' seems to be a typo; use 'green forests'. The phrase 'the Greenland and the Golden Land' is incorrect; 'Greenland' is a proper noun for a country and likely not intended — keep 'the Golden Land' (Myanmar's nickname) and avoid 'the Greenland' unless intended. Improvements: use clear verbs for movement, correct word order for declarative sentences, fix typos, and use appropriate names/epithets.