Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is missing. You should give a clear, direct response (topic sentence) and one or two supporting details using simple linking words. Keep it natural and concise (max 5 sentences). For example, state whether you like taking photos, why, and mention a specific type of view you enjoy.

예시: Yes, I do enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing cityscapes because of the interesting architecture and lights, and I often take photos during the evening to capture the atmosphere. For instance, last month I took several shots of the riverfront that showed how the buildings reflect on the water.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains unrelated words. Begin with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (because, for example, or also). Avoid filler and unrelated phrases. Use concrete details such as types of scenes, lighting, or feelings to make it coherent and natural.

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the architectural details and the busy street life. For example, I like photographing modern buildings and neon signs, and I often focus on contrasts between old and new structures to tell a visual story.

제안: This answer is mostly incoherent. Start with a clear statement of preference (own country, other countries, or both), then give specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (however, because, for instance) and keep sentences grammatical and concise. Mention particular places or experiences to add credibility.

예시: I prefer taking pictures of views in other countries because traveling exposes me to different architectures and cultures. For instance, when I visited Japan last year I photographed traditional temples and modern city scenes, which helped me learn new composition techniques.

× Move. I like to capture this and I believe it's because of urban areas.

✓ I like to capture urban scenes because I find them interesting and developed.

The original sentence begins with an unrelated word 'Move' and contains unclear, fragmented structure. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Suggestion: remove 'Move', state the subject and verb clearly, and connect clauses logically. Use 'urban scenes' instead of 'this' to clarify the object.

× I think of how it's developed but immediately notice my reference in the charge making a lot of relationship.

✓ I think about how the city has developed, and I immediately notice details that show its history and character.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical—incorrect phrasing 'notice my reference in the charge making a lot of relationship' is unclear. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Suggestion: use clear subjects and objects, replace vague nouns ('charge','reference') with specific words ('details','history and character'), and connect ideas with 'and'.

× Why are I only upgrades is the fullest decision because I cannot open it up by entering a customer from different cars.

✓ I prefer visiting other countries because I cannot learn about them just by seeing tourists arriving in cars.

The original sentence has multiple grammatical and clarity problems (incorrect 'Why are I only upgrades', awkward clauses). This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Suggestion: express preference clearly ('I prefer visiting other countries') and explain the reason in a logical way.

× But it is going to be used like in the world we love to get a petrol from the switch to the ground.

✓ But it will be useful to see how people around the world get petrol from stations to their vehicles.

The original sentence uses incorrect prepositions and odd noun choices ('from the switch to the ground'). This is an incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11). Suggestion: replace 'like in the world' with 'around the world' and use correct prepositions 'from ... to ...' with appropriate nouns ('stations to vehicles').