Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời tự nhiên và chứa ý chính nhưng hơi dài và có lỗi kết cấu (ví dụ danh sách không rõ ràng). Nên mở đầu trực tiếp, dùng một hoặc hai câu bổ sung rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sắp xếp ý theo trình tự hợp lý. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về thói quen (khi nào, bằng thiết bị gì) và dùng từ nối để liên kết ý.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me capture memorable moments and discover new perspectives. For example, I usually take photos with my smartphone when I travel to the coast or explore cities; I focus on sunsets and architectural details because they create striking images.

제안: Câu trả lời có ý chính rõ ràng nhưng ngôn ngữ và cấu trúc nhiều chỗ không chính xác (cụm từ như “open country sign”, “wind fields”, “busy wake up walk”, và mâu thuẫn giữa ‘‘calmer’’ và ‘‘beauty streets and traffic’’). Cần sửa lỗi ngữ pháp, dùng từ vựng phù hợp, và tổ chức ý mạch lạc: nêu lý do chính, sau đó đưa hai chi tiết minh họa có liên kết bằng từ nối.

예시: I prefer rural views because they feel peaceful and natural. For example, I love watching colorful sunsets over wide fields and listening to birdsong in the morning, which helps me relax; in contrast, city scenes can be busy and noisy.

제안: Câu trả lời rõ ràng, tự nhiên và có cân nhắc hai phía. Tuy nhiên một số cụm từ hơi lủng củng (ví dụ “life brings like family memories”) và nên kết cấu ngắn gọn hơn: nêu lựa chọn chính, giải thích bằng lý do cụ thể, rồi nhấn mạnh thêm cân bằng với quan điểm đối lập. Dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

예시: I usually prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and bring back family memories; for example, hiking a local mountain reminds me of childhood trips. However, I also enjoy visiting foreign landscapes for their novelty and different cultural atmospheres.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because photography helps me capture memorable moments and see things from unique perspectives.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because photography helps me capture memorable moments and see things from unique perspectives.

No grammatical error detected that matches the given list. Sentence is correct. Keep present participles taking and seeing as they are used correctly after like and help.

× For example, I often photograph cityscapes and coastal landscapes and travel, which I find relaxing and creatively inspired.

✓ For example, I often photograph cityscapes and coastal landscapes and travel for inspiration, which I find relaxing and creatively stimulating.

The original sentence has awkward coordination and an unclear modifier. 'and travel' is not parallel to the noun phrases and 'creatively inspired' is incorrect collocation. Suggest using 'travel for inspiration' and 'creatively stimulating' to make the sentence clear and grammatically natural.

× I prefer views in rural areas because the open country sign and wind fields have made lots of busy wake up walk.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the open countryside and wind-swept fields make me want to take long, leisurely walks.

Multiple issues: 'the open country sign' is incorrect article and noun choice, 'wind fields' should be 'wind-swept fields' or 'windy fields', tense and verb choice 'have made lots of busy wake up walk' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to a natural expression: 'make me want to take long, leisurely walks.' This fixes article usage and sentence structure.

× For example, I enjoy watching colorful sunsets over the fields and listening to birds which feels much calmer, and looking at the beauty streets and traffic.

✓ For example, I enjoy watching colorful sunsets over the fields and listening to birds, which feels much calmer, and looking at the beautiful streets and traffic.

Pronoun/reference issue and adjective form: 'which' refers to the preceding clause but 'feels' should agree with 'watching and listening' (plural activity) or be rephrased. Better: keep 'which feels much calmer' if referring to the experience as a whole (singular), but ensure adjective 'beautiful' is correct form not 'beauty'. Also add commas to separate clauses. Suggested correction uses 'beautiful' instead of 'beauty'.

× I usually prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and emotionally resonant, for example, seeing a local mountain.

✓ I usually prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and emotionally resonant; for example, seeing a local mountain evokes memories.

Present participle 'seeing' is okay, but the clause is a sentence fragment describing an example. Make it clear by adding a verb like 'evokes memories' to complete the idea.

× Of course, life brings like family memories and a sense of belonging.

✓ Of course, they bring family memories and a sense of belonging.

The original uses 'life brings like family memories' which is ungrammatical. It's unclear what 'life' refers to; using 'they' to refer to 'views in my own country' (previous sentence) is clearer. Remove 'like' which is misused and correct verb agreement.

× However, I also enjoy scenery abroad for its novelty and cultural differences.

✓ However, I also enjoy scenery abroad because of its novelty and cultural differences.

Sentence is mostly correct but 'for its' is acceptable; changing to 'because of its' makes the causal relationship clearer. No major grammatical error but minor stylistic improvement.