Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and use correct verbs and vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and give one specific reason or example. Also keep it within 1–3 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking different kinds of photos, especially landscapes and cityscapes, because I like capturing interesting light and colors.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (because, for example). Avoid hesitations and incorrect word choices; use 'scenes' or 'views' instead of 'weaves'. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer urban views because city scenes offer a wide variety of subjects, such as architecture and street life. For example, I can photograph interesting buildings, busy markets, and people going about their day.

제안: State your preference clearly and give specific reasons with logical linking (because, so, for example). Avoid repetition and finish your thought. Use concrete details about what is different abroad (culture, architecture, light). Limit to 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: I prefer photographing views in other countries because the scenery and architecture are different from what I grew up with. For example, foreign markets, historic buildings, and unique landscapes offer fresh subjects and new perspectives.

× I like to wash uh, different type of pictures.

✓ I like to take, uh, different types of pictures.

The verb 'wash' is incorrect in this context; 'take pictures' is the correct collocation. 'Different type' should be plural 'different types' to agree with the plural noun 'pictures'. Use 'take' for photographing and pluralize 'type' when referring to multiple kinds. Suggestion: learn common collocations (take pictures, make a photo) and match singular/plural for 'type/types'.

× Yes, I do, uh, prefer urban areas because in urban areas there are nice, umm, weaves, landscapes, landscape weaves.

✓ Yes, I do prefer urban areas because there are nice views and landscapes in urban areas.

The student used 'weaves' likely meaning 'views' and repeated 'landscapes' awkwardly. 'There are' correctly matches plural 'views and landscapes' (no change to verb), but word choice and word order needed fixing. Also remove redundant phrase repetition. Suggestion: use the correct noun 'views' and place 'in urban areas' once at the end or beginning for clarity.

× So which can be really interesting to take pictures because we can capture a lot more things in there.

✓ They can be really interesting to photograph because we can capture many more things there.

The original sentence has unclear reference ('which') and incorrect phrase 'in there'. Use 'they' to refer to 'views and landscapes', 'photograph' or 'take pictures' is better than 'take pictures' twice, and use 'many more' instead of 'a lot more' for formality. 'There' is sufficient without 'in'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun antecedents are clear and avoid redundant prepositions.

× I prefer umm, in other countries because, uh, from our childhood we were taking pictures in our own country.

✓ I prefer, umm, other countries because, uh, from our childhood we have been taking pictures in our own country.

The phrase 'prefer in other countries' is incorrect; use 'prefer other countries' or 'prefer to take pictures in other countries'. The tense 'we were taking' suggests a past continuous without clear timeframe; 'have been taking' or 'have taken' is better to indicate experience from childhood to present. Suggestion: use 'prefer other countries' and present perfect to show ongoing experience.

× So they are very familiar to us, like we have seen it many times.

✓ So they are very familiar to us; we have seen them many times.

Pronoun number mismatch: 'they' (plural) must be followed by 'them', not 'it'. 'They are' refers to plural 'places/views'. Use 'have seen them' for agreement. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.

× So I would prefer to take, uh, pictures from other countries because it'll, it'll give us, uh, a different type of.

✓ So I would prefer to take, uh, pictures in other countries because it will give us, uh, a different kind of experience.

'Pictures from other countries' is understandable but 'pictures in other countries' is more natural when traveling. The contraction 'it'll' should be 'it will' for clarity; more importantly, the noun phrase 'a different type of' is incomplete and needs an object such as 'experience'. Suggestion: complete the noun phrase and use 'in other countries' for location.