Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix tense/word order errors (e.g., "I'm already photogenic person", "I that have").

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of scenic views. For example, when I visit a park or a coastline I often take several shots to capture the light and colours, and I save the best ones as memories on my phone.

제안: Give a clear direct answer first, then support with specific reasons and a linking word. Correct article use and phrasing (e.g., "a scenic beauty" → "scenic beauty" or "a scenic view"). Avoid vague phrases like "enjoy the ideas."

예시: I prefer rural views to urban ones because rural areas have more natural scenery. For instance, I enjoy green fields, mountain silhouettes, and colourful sunsets, which I rarely see in concrete city centres.

제안: Answer directly then give specific comparisons using linking words. Use correct noun forms and articles ("less population" → "fewer people" or "lower population density"). Avoid listing synonyms repeatedly; pick a few precise points.

예시: I usually prefer views in other countries, such as Switzerland or parts of the United States, because they often have lower population density and cleaner air. For example, the Alps offer dramatic mountain scenery and clear skies that I don't always find at home.

× Yes, I'm already photogenic person so whenever I explore any beautiful place I that have a very very beautiful view and just check out my phone and just click the pictures. I like it to keep it as a memory.

✓ Yes, I'm already a photogenic person, so whenever I explore a beautiful place that has a very, very beautiful view I take out my phone and just click pictures. I like to keep them as memories.

Errors: missing indefinite article before 'photogenic person' and 'beautiful place'; incorrect relative clause 'I that have' should be 'that has'; incorrect verb forms 'check out my phone and just click the pictures' are awkward and 'click pictures' is more natural; singular/plural and pronoun reference: 'pictures' -> 'them' and 'a memory' -> 'memories'. Suggestions: add 'a' before singular count nouns, use 'that has' for the place with 'view', use simple present verbs 'take out' and 'click' for habitual actions, and match plural nouns and pronouns ('pictures'/'them','memories').

× I will always prefer the beautiful views that are there and enjoy the ideas because in urban areas nowadays we can't find an scenic beauty.

✓ I will always prefer the beautiful views and enjoy them because in urban areas nowadays we can't find scenic beauty.

Errors: unnecessary 'that are there' and 'ideas' is incorrect word choice; 'an scenic beauty' uses wrong article before consonant sound. Suggestions: remove redundant phrase, replace 'ideas' with 'them' referring to views, use 'scenic beauty' without an article when speaking generally.

× It is more like the building architecture.

✓ It is more like building architecture.

Error: unnecessary definite article 'the' before uncountable noun phrase 'building architecture' when speaking generally. Suggestion: drop the article for general statements.

× So I will always prefer the rural areas because of its greenery, the mountains, the sunset, scenic views.

✓ So I will always prefer rural areas because of their greenery, the mountains, the sunsets and scenic views.

Errors: mismatch between plural 'rural areas' and singular possessive 'its'; 'sunset' should be plural when listing general features. Suggestion: use 'their' to agree with plural noun and pluralize nouns when speaking generally.

× I usually prefer beautiful views in other countries like Switzerland or like United States, because there are a lot of greeneries and there are less population, less pollution, the blue skies, the beautiful natural landscapes, greenery.

✓ I usually prefer beautiful views in other countries like Switzerland or the United States, because there is a lot of greenery, less population, less pollution, blue skies and beautiful natural landscapes.

Errors: missing definite article before 'United States'; 'greeneries' is incorrect plural form — use 'greenery' (uncountable); 'there are less population' should be 'there is less population' or better 'lower population' but uncountable noun use is preferred; unnecessary repeated 'greenery' and articles 'the' before general nouns. Suggestions: use 'the United States', use uncountable 'greenery' and correct agreement 'there is', and list items in parallel form without repeated articles.