Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with grammar and sentence clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and avoid redundancy. Use one or two supporting details with linking words and specific examples (where/what you photograph).

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos when I travel because they help me remember beautiful landscapes and delicious meals. For example, I often photograph sunrise views at the beach and local dishes at night markets, then I share the best shots with friends on social media.

제안: Start with a direct answer and then compare using linking words. Avoid short fragmented sentences. Provide one or two specific contrasts to make your response more vivid.

예시: I prefer both urban and rural views for different reasons. For instance, I enjoy cityscapes because of the bright lights and towering skyscrapers, while rural areas appeal to me with peaceful forests and wide-open fields.

제안: Answer directly and give clear reasons with cleaner sentence structure. Replace casual words (’cause) with formal connectors (because) and add specific examples or comparisons about what differs between home and abroad.

예시: I like both views at home and abroad because each offers something unique. For example, at home I appreciate familiar landscapes and cultural sites, but when I visit places like Thailand I enjoy the warm weather, clear sea, and picturesque beaches that feel very different from home.

× Yes I do I really enjoying taking pictures when I go travel.

✓ Yes, I do. I really enjoy taking pictures when I travel.

The verb 'enjoy' should be in base form 'enjoy' when conjugated for first person singular present: 'I really enjoy'. 'Enjoying' is a present participle and requires an auxiliary (e.g., 'I am enjoying') which is not intended here. Also use 'travel' without 'go' or say 'go traveling'; the correct simple form is 'when I travel'. Suggestions: use 'I really enjoy' or 'I am really enjoying' for continuous meaning, and use 'when I travel' or 'when I go traveling'.

× I'd like to record the good views and delicious food, and I'd like to share the photos with my friends in social media.

✓ I'd like to record the good views and delicious food, and I'd like to share the photos with my friends on social media.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'social media'; the correct preposition is 'on social media'. 'On' is used for platforms or media. Also 'the photos' is fine if referring to specific photos; no change needed there. Suggestion: use 'on social media' when talking about sharing content online.

× I'd like to. I like both of them.

✓ I like both of them.

The fragment 'I'd like to.' is incomplete and unclear in this context. It seems unnecessary and interrupts the flow. Removing it yields a correct, complete response. Suggestion: avoid short unclear fragments; answer directly 'I like both of them.' or specify what you 'like to' do.

× I like the beautiful lights and the tall building in urban areas and I also like the nature view in rural areas.

✓ I like the beautiful lights and the tall buildings in urban areas, and I also like the natural scenery in rural areas.

Pluralization: 'building' should be 'buildings' when speaking generally. 'Nature view' is not natural English; use 'natural scenery' or 'the countryside views'. 'Natural' is the correct adjective form of 'nature'. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. Suggestion: use the plural for general statements and correct adjective forms like 'natural scenery'.

× I like both of them 'cause I have been to other different countries.

✓ I like both of them because I have been to different other countries.

The phrase 'other different countries' is redundant; use 'different countries' or 'other countries'. Also use 'because' instead of informal ''cause' in formal responses. Word order 'different other countries' can be 'other different countries' but best is 'different countries' or 'other countries'. Suggestion: simplify to 'different countries' and avoid contractions in formal speech.

× I love the different views from different countries like Thailand.

✓ I love the different views from countries like Thailand.

The definite article 'the' before 'different views' is acceptable but repetitive with 'different countries like Thailand'; simplify to avoid repetition. Also 'from different countries like Thailand' can be made smoother as 'from countries like Thailand'. Suggestion: reduce redundancy: 'I love the different views from countries like Thailand.'

× I really enjoy the weather and the sea and the beach there.

✓ I really enjoy the weather, the sea, and the beaches there.

'Beach' should be plural 'beaches' when speaking generally about beaches in a country. Also list items with commas. 'Enjoy' is correctly used here; only pluralization and parallel structure need adjustment. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements and maintain parallel structure in lists.