Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce repetition, use a clear topic sentence, and organize supporting details with linking words. Be specific about why you enjoy these subjects and limit your response to 2–4 concise sentences. For example, avoid repeating words ("different different") and group similar items (e.g., nature, cityscapes, food).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of various scenes because photography helps me notice details and memories. For example, I often photograph wildlife when I visit parks, city streets when I travel, and colorful dishes when I dine out, because each subject tells a different story.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then use linking words to compare reasons for each choice. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid vague words like "scenic" without explanation. Be specific about what you like in each area.

예시: I prefer both urban and rural views because each offers different photo opportunities. In rural areas, I enjoy photographing open fields and wildlife for their natural light and tranquility, whereas in cities I like capturing architecture and lively street scenes for their shapes and colors.

제안: Give a clear, grammatical topic sentence and explain with specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases like "recognition" and fix plural/grammar errors. Mention a concrete example or contrast between local and foreign views to add content.

예시: I enjoy views both in my country and abroad because local landscapes are familiar and comforting, while foreign scenery offers new colors and cultural details. For instance, at home I like photographing traditional festivals, but when I travel I focus on unique landmarks and landscapes I haven't seen before.

× I love capturing pictures of different different views, for example animals or the new place where I am exploring and additionally pictures of food and skies and natural scenarios.

✓ I love capturing pictures of different views, for example of animals, new places I am exploring, food, skies, and natural scenes.

The original sentence repeats 'different' (redundant) and uses awkward noun phrases. 'Different different' is incorrect (adjective repetition). Use 'different views'. Use 'of animals' to indicate examples. 'The new place where I am exploring' is wordy; 'new places I am exploring' is clearer and matches number. 'Natural scenarios' is unnatural; 'natural scenes' is the appropriate noun phrase. Also add commas to separate items in a list. (Grammar problem type ID: 13)

× I prefer both the views whether in urban area or rural area because I feel both the areas has its own beauty and in rural areas there are more natural scenarios which I can capture and in urban areas there are scenic.

✓ I prefer both urban and rural views because I feel both areas have their own beauty. In rural areas there are more natural scenes I can capture, and in urban areas there are scenic views.

Problems: 'the views whether in urban area or rural area' is awkward; 'urban area or rural area' should be plural or general: 'urban and rural views'. 'Both the areas has its own beauty' has subject-verb agreement and article/plural issues: use 'both areas have their own beauty' ('areas' plural with 'have'). 'Natural scenarios' is awkward; use 'natural scenes'. The final clause 'in urban areas there are scenic' lacks a noun; add 'views'. (Grammar problem type ID: 1)

× I prefer views in my country as well as other countries because each country has its own recognition and it feels very pleasant and peaceful to watch a scenic and beautiful views of.

✓ I prefer views in my country as well as in other countries because each country has its own character, and it is very pleasant and peaceful to see scenic and beautiful views.

Problems: 'each country has its own recognition' is unnatural — use 'character' or 'unique qualities'. 'Watch a scenic and beautiful views of' is ungrammatical: 'watch' is less appropriate than 'see' for landscapes, and 'a ... views' mixes singular article with plural noun. Use 'it is very pleasant and peaceful to see scenic and beautiful views.' Also add 'in' before 'other countries'. (Grammar problem type ID: 13)