Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 全体的に意味は伝わりますが、話し方がやや断片的で繰り返しやため息（uh, umm）が多く、文が短くまとまっていません。トピック文をはっきり述べ（I enjoy photography）、その後に具体例（wildlife）と理由を付け加えるとより自然で効果的です。また、冗長な語を減らし、1～3文で答える練習をしてください。

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs, especially when I travel. I particularly like capturing wildlife because I find animal behaviour fascinating and it makes each photo unique.

제안: 答えは明確で理由も述べていますが、表現をより自然にし、語彙の正確さを改善しましょう（"reminds me of nostalgic feelings"は不自然）。リンク表現を使って主張→理由→具体例の流れを作るとさらに良くなります。

예시: I like both urban and rural views, but I prefer photographing rural areas. This is because being surrounded by nature evokes a sense of nostalgia and tranquility, which I try to capture in my photos.

제안: 文法や語順の誤り、発言の途切れや冗長さが目立ちます（"Both fields are good"や"I like. Views in other countries Recently"）。まず明確なトピック文を作り、過去の経験を具体的に述べる際は時制と語順を整えてください。また接続詞で流れを滑らかにしましょう。

예시: I enjoy views both at home and abroad, but recently I prefer photographing scenes in other countries because I have taken several business trips abroad. For example, I visited Washington, where the cityscapes offered lots of interesting photo opportunities.

× Yes I do. I like taking a trip and like taking pictures. Uh, especially I like umm, taking pictures of wildlife.

✓ Yes, I do. I like taking trips and I like taking pictures. Especially, I enjoy taking pictures of wildlife.

The student used 'taking a trip' then 'taking pictures' which is correct form but inconsistent singular/plural; use plural 'trips' when speaking generally. Also sentence fragments and repetition exist; combine with conjunction and replace one 'like' with 'enjoy' for variety. Include commas for natural pauses.

× I like both of them, but I prefer taking pictures of rural areas because it reminds me of nostalgic feelings to be surrounded by nature.

✓ I like both, but I prefer taking pictures of rural areas because they remind me of nostalgic feelings of being surrounded by nature.

The pronoun 'it' does not agree with plural 'rural areas'; use 'they'. Also 'nostalgic feelings to be surrounded by nature' is incorrect preposition/structure; use 'feelings of being surrounded by nature'. Remove 'of them' after 'both' for natural phrasing.

× Both fields are good, but I like. Views in other countries Recently, because I took several three business trips to other countries, for example, I visited Washington.

✓ Both are fine, but I prefer views in other countries recently because I took three business trips abroad; for example, I visited Washington.

The original has fragmented sentences and extra words ('like.' before 'Views'). 'Both fields' is awkward; use 'Both are fine' or 'Both types'. 'Several three' is ungrammatical; choose 'three' or 'several'. 'To other countries' can be shortened to 'abroad'. Combine clauses with proper punctuation for clarity.