Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use clearer, natural phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid vague phrases like “some kind of motivation” and correct small grammatical issues (e.g. use plural/singular consistently).

예시: Yes — I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially when I travel abroad. For example, I often photograph mountains and wildflowers because their colors and shapes inspire me to explore new places and share my experiences on social media.

제안: Correct vocabulary and grammar errors and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Begin with a clear topic sentence (state your preference), then give two specific reasons with linking phrases like “because” and “for example.” Avoid fillers like “like” and unclear words such as “wheels” or “city cast.”

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because there is more greenery and fresh air. For example, I enjoy looking at fields of trees and open meadows where the sunshine feels calm and peaceful, unlike the crowded streets and tall buildings in the city.

제안: Clarify your meaning and fix pronunciation/word choice mistakes. Give a direct answer (own country or other countries) and then support it with specific reasons. Use connectors (“however,” “because,” “for example”) and avoid repetition. Replace unclear words like “blood” and “strange” with accurate terms like “home” and “unfamiliar.”

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they feel unfamiliar and exciting. For example, seeing coastal cliffs or architectural styles I’ve never seen at home makes me eager to take photos and share them with friends who haven’t traveled there.

× I really like it to be honest, especially when I'm in another country.

✓ I really like it, to be honest, especially when I'm in another country.

The original sentence mainly needed punctuation, not an -ing correction; keep 'like' + noun phrase 'it'. Suggestion: add commas for clarity and natural rhythm.

× I like taking pictures of scenery, of mountains, of trees and flowers.

✓ I like taking pictures of scenery, mountains, trees, and flowers.

No article is needed before uncountable 'scenery' or plural nouns in this list. Use commas and the Oxford comma for clarity.

× It gives me some kind of motivation to explore the world and show them in my social media.

✓ It gives me motivation to explore the world and share it on my social media.

Use singular 'it' to refer to 'taking pictures' or 'scenery' and 'share it' rather than 'show them'. 'Social media' is uncountable here so use 'on my social media'. Also remove 'some kind of' for conciseness.

× I definitely prefer wheels in rural areas because it's more it has more greenery and like the city cast is not good looking in my opinion.

✓ I definitely prefer views in rural areas because there is more greenery, and I don't find the cityscape attractive.

The speaker likely meant 'views' not 'wheels'. Use 'there is' for existence and 'cityscape' for urban appearance. Combine clauses properly and avoid filler 'like' and awkward phrasing 'not good looking'.

× I prefer natural beauty and green trees and sunshine.

✓ I prefer natural beauty, green trees, and sunshine.

List items should be parallel and separated by commas; no adjective change required. This improves fluency and correctness.

× Actually I prefer blood but I like the views in another countries more because I'm strange to it and it's it's it has a different taste and I'm not used to seeing it and also my friends are not used to see it and I can show it show them I.

✓ Actually I prefer my own country, but I like the views in other countries more because they are unfamiliar to me and have a different character; I'm not used to seeing them, and my friends aren't either, so I can show them these views.

Multiple errors: 'blood' is incorrect word choice, likely 'home' or 'my own country'; use 'other countries' without 'another'. Use plural pronoun 'they' for 'views', not 'it'. Replace 'strange to it' with 'unfamiliar to me'. Use parallel infinitive forms and correct word order 'show them these views'. Fix repetition and punctuation. Suggestions: choose correct nouns, match pronouns to plural antecedents, and simplify long run-on sentences.