Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and better structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words and avoid redundancy. Correct grammar (verb tenses, articles) and use concise phrases.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views when I travel. I do this because it helps me preserve memories and capture the atmosphere of each place. For example, I often photograph sunsets or street scenes so I can look back and remember the trip.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then explain with specific, coherent reasons. Use linking words and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'lighting', 'skyscrapers', 'nostalgia') and avoid unclear phrases. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the bright city lights and tall buildings. They feel familiar and exciting to me, like scenes I have seen in films, which makes me feel nostalgic and inspired.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give specific reasons. Correct word choice and grammar (e.g., 'views', 'place', 'prefer Vietnamese views'), and avoid vague metaphors like 'filter'. Add an example to support your point.

예시: I prefer views in my home country, Vietnam, because it feels familiar and special to me. For instance, I love photos of Ha Long Bay and Hoi An because they remind me of family trips and the country's unique landscapes.

× Yes I too most of a time when I traveling outside because I like going sightseeing so taking pictures of different views that I go to can help me keep the memory at that place and also have something to look back in the future.

✓ Yes, I do as well. Most of the time when I travel outside, because I like going sightseeing, taking pictures of the different views I visit helps me preserve memories of those places and gives me something to look back on in the future.

Errors: incorrect present tense form 'I traveling' should be 'I travel' (Present tense issue). Missing auxiliary for agreement 'I too' should be 'I do as well'. Use of gerund phrase and clause punctuation needed. 'can help me keep the memory at that place' is unnatural; use 'helps me preserve memories of those places'. Preposition 'look back in the future' should be 'look back on in the future'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions, include auxiliary 'do' for emphasis, and choose correct prepositions ('of', 'on').

× In my preference, I would choose urban areas because I like seeing like a lot of lightings and high buildings.

✓ Personally, I would choose urban areas because I like seeing a lot of lights and tall buildings.

Errors: 'In my preference' is unnatural; use 'Personally' or 'I prefer' (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). 'like seeing like a lot of lightings' repeats 'like' and uses incorrect plural 'lightings' instead of 'lights'. 'high buildings' is better as 'tall buildings'. Suggestion: avoid filler 'like', use correct nouns ('lights') and adjective order ('tall buildings').

× It gives me a sense of Hudson and personalized that I always seen in the movie, seen in the movie.

✓ It gives me a sense of nostalgia and familiarity that I always see in movies.

Errors: unclear phrase 'sense of Hudson and personalized' likely intended 'sense of nostalgia and personalization' but incorrect word choice and structure (Sentence structure errors). 'that I always seen in the movie' uses wrong verb form 'seen' instead of 'see' and 'the movie' should be plural 'movies'. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary ('nostalgia', 'familiarity'), use present tense 'see' for habitual impression, and use plural 'movies' or 'films'.

× So it's quite.

✓ So it's quite charming.

Errors: incomplete sentence with missing complement making it unclear (Sentence structure errors). 'So it's quite' needs an adjective to complete the idea. Suggestion: add an appropriate adjective such as 'charming', 'familiar', or 'appealing' to finish the sentence.

× I prefer bills in my home country because Vietnam is already play placed an important part in my heart, so maybe it can become a filter for me when I look at the views in my country.

✓ I prefer scenes in my home country because Vietnam already holds an important place in my heart, so it has a special meaning for me when I look at views in my country.

Errors: 'bills' is incorrect word choice for scenery; should be 'scenes' or 'views' (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs/word choice). 'is already play placed an important part' is ungrammatical; correct structure is 'already holds an important place'. 'become a filter for me' is awkward; 'has a special meaning for me' is clearer. Suggestion: use correct nouns for 'views' and idiomatic verbs like 'hold an important place' or 'mean a lot to me'.

× And Vietnam has many famous destinations so I think I would prefer Vietnamese.

✓ Vietnam also has many famous destinations, so I think I would prefer visiting places in Vietnam.

Errors: 'prefer Vietnamese' is incomplete and ambiguous; 'Vietnamese' is an adjective or noun for people/ language, not places (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). The sentence needs 'visiting places in' or 'views in Vietnam'. Suggestion: be specific: 'prefer visiting places in Vietnam' or 'prefer views in Vietnam'.