Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更直接且更自然，主句明确表达喜好，然后用一到两句具体细节支持。避免重复（如“walking outside, walking around”）并注意语法（如动词时态和冠词）。可以用连接词让回答更连贯。

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. When I travel or walk around my neighborhood, I often photograph sunsets, wildlife such as rhinos when I visit safaris, and striking landscapes to remember the moment.

제안: 答案缺乏清晰主句且有语法错误。应先明确表态（prefer rural/urban），然后给出具体原因并用连接词衔接。避免含糊表达（如“it makes me sound kind of”），用具体感受或例子代替。控制在最多五句内。

예시: I prefer rural views because I live in a busy city and rural areas feel calm and peaceful. For example, I like open fields and quiet villages where I can relax and enjoy nature away from traffic and noise.

제안: 总体表达较好但有语法和词汇选择问题。应把时态和句子结构调整为更自然的形式，减少冗余（如“excited and thrilling”两个形容词重复含义）。可以给出具体例子说明为什么喜欢国外景色。

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they offer sights I haven’t seen before, which is very exciting. For instance, seeing ancient architecture in Europe or unique landscapes in Iceland gives me a fresh perspective and memorable experiences.

× Yes, when I go on the trip or just walking outside, walking around, I will take pictures of some beautiful views like a sunset or maybe a rhino or incredible landscape.

✓ Yes, when I go on a trip or just walk outside, I will take pictures of some beautiful views like a sunset, a rhinoceros, or an incredible landscape.

句中不正确地使用了动名词短语“walking outside, walking around”。在此句里应使用动词原形或不定式结构表示一般情况或习惯动作，且“go on the trip”应改为常用表达“go on a trip”。另外，“rhino”作为正式写作宜用全称“rhinoceros”，并在并列名词间加逗号以提高可读性。建议在描述习惯性动作时使用一般现在时或将动词保持原形："go on a trip or just walk outside"。

× I think I prefer rural areas things I living in a busy city, so the busy feeling in the city is my daily life and it makes me sound kind of.

✓ I think I prefer rural areas because I live in a busy city, so the busy feeling is my daily life and it makes me feel a bit strange.

原句结构混乱，缺少连接词并且动词形式错误（"I living" 应为 "I live"）。需要加入因果连词“because”来连接原因，并将动词改为正确的现在时。最后一句“it makes me sound kind of”是错误表达，应改为“it makes me feel a bit strange”或“it feels a bit overwhelming”。建议理清句子逻辑：先给出偏好，再解释原因，使用正确的现在时动词。

× I prefer the views of other countries because when I go abroad, seeing the view I never saw before, it always made me feel excited and thrilling.

✓ I prefer the views of other countries because when I go abroad and see views I have never seen before, they always make me feel excited and thrilled.

句子时态不一致：主句用一般现在时“prefer”，从句却用了过去时“made/me/never saw”。应保持现在时来表达习惯性或经常发生的情况，故将从句改为现在完成时或一般现在完成时“have never seen”，并将谓语调整为现在时“make”。另外，“seeing the view I never saw before”需要改为更自然的从句结构“see views I have never seen before”，并将“thrilling”用作形容词修饰感受也可，但此处搭配“make me feel excited and thrilled”更自然。