Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は自然で要点を押さえていますが、いくつかの点を改善できます。まず、文法と語順の小さな誤り（例: “to keep them as memories” → “to keep them as memories” は意味通るがより自然な表現は “as mementos” や “to remember those times”）、語句の不明瞭さ（“library St. scenes” のように略しすぎ）を直してください。次に、回答の構成でトピック文の後に一つか二つの具体的な詳細（どんな被写体か、どのように撮るか、使用する機材や時間帯など）を入れて、リンク語（for example, also, because）を使って論理を明確にしてください。文は最大5文に収め、冗長さを避けてください。

예시: Yes, I do. When I was at university I often photographed the campus to keep the memories of student life. Nowadays I usually take pictures around my workplace, especially of interesting buildings and the old public library near my office, because I love architectural details. For example, I focus on textures and light at sunset to capture dramatic contrasts.

제안: この回答は意図は伝わりますが、語彙の誤用（“coastal steascapes” や “Sky 3 standard” などの不明確な語句）、文の構造の混乱、具体性の欠如が見られます。まず、正しい語彙（例えば “coastal seascapes”, “Sky Tree” など）を使い、文を簡潔なトピック文＋理由＋具体例の順に整理してください。リンク語（for example, because）を適切に用い、1〜3の具体的な例や比較を入れて説得力を高めましょう。発音上の問題があれば語や地名をはっきり言う練習を。

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy modern architecture and lively city scenes. For example, landmarks like Tokyo Tower and Tokyo Skytree create an impressive skyline, and coastal promenades in the city combine buildings with sea views. Because of the variety of styles and details, cities inspire me more than rural landscapes.

제안: 良い回答で、理由と具体例が含まれています。ただし、文法と表現を少し改善するとより自然です（“an ancient architecture” → “ancient architecture”，“narrow St.” → “narrow streets”）。また、例を述べた後に短い感想や比較（自国の風景との違い）を加えると会話が豊かになります。リンク語（for example, which, because）を適切に使い、文を3〜4文にまとめてください。

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I love historic buildings and coastal scenery. For example, the ancient architecture and charming old town in Greece were breathtaking, and the narrow streets left a strong impression on me. Compared to scenery at home, those places felt more picturesque and full of history.

× Now I usually take pictures in the city near my workplace because I enjoy the architecture and library St. scenes.

✓ Now I usually take pictures in the city near my workplace because I enjoy the architecture and the library street scenes.

The sentence mixes nouns and abbreviations awkwardly and omits an article before 'library street scenes'. Use present simple 'usually take' correctly; add 'the' before a specific place and expand 'St.' to 'street' for clarity. Improve word order: 'library street scenes' makes clear the type of scenes.

× When I was a university student I often took photos of the campus to keep them as memories.

✓ When I was a university student I often took photos of the campus to keep them as memories.

No change needed for plurality: 'photos' (plural) and 'memories' (plural) are correct. However, 'the campus' is fine. Suggestion: you could say 'to keep as memories' but current sentence is grammatically acceptable.

× I prefer urban views because I find modern architecture and coastal steascapes fantastic and for example landmarks like Tokyo Tower and Sky 3 standard and create an impression skyline.

✓ I prefer urban views because I find modern architecture and coastal seascapes fantastic; for example, landmarks like Tokyo Tower and Skytree create an impressive skyline.

The original sentence has word choice errors ('steascapes', 'Sky 3 standard'), poor punctuation and word order. Correct 'coastal seascapes', add a connector and punctuation, and replace 'Sky 3 standard' with the proper name 'Skytree' (assuming Tokyo Skytree) and correct verb form 'create' and adjective 'impressive'. These changes fix sentence structure and clarity.

× I prefer views in other countries because I love seeing historic buildings and coastal scenery.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I love seeing historic buildings and coastal scenery.

This sentence is already correct in present simple tense and needs no correction. It correctly expresses a general preference.

× For example, an ancient architecture and charming Old Town in Greece was breathtaking and its narrow St. left a strong impression on me.

✓ For example, ancient architecture and the charming Old Town in Greece were breathtaking, and its narrow streets left a strong impression on me.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'architecture and Old Town' are plural, so use 'were' not 'was'. Also expand 'St.' to 'streets' and make 'architecture' uncountable (remove 'an'). Add 'the' before 'charming Old Town' for specificity. These fixes correct past tense agreement and article usage.