Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は内容が伝わるが、話の構成が不明瞭で言いよどみや語彙の誤用があるため、明確な主題文と具体的な詳細を短く整理するとよいです。具体的には：1) 最初に直接の肯定・否定の応答（例：Yes, I do.）を置く、2) 過去と現在の習慣を分けて一文ずつ述べる、3) “uh”などのフィラーを減らす、4) 関連語（campers は文脈で不適切）や表現（“through those scenes”は不自然）を正しい語に置き換えること。

예시: Yes, I do. When I was a university student about five years ago, I often took photos of my friends camping to keep memories. Nowadays I mostly photograph urban scenes near my workplace because I enjoy capturing architectural details and city life.

제안: 答えは明確に都市景観を好むとしていますが、多くの語彙の誤用（imaginable, abuse, sky trees）と文法の不自然さが見られます。改善点：1) 直接的な主張（I prefer urban views.）で始める、2) 理由は具体的に（建築様式・夜景・利便性など）述べる、3) 固有名詞は正確に（Tokyo Tower, Skytree）記載する、4) 1〜2の補足文に限定して簡潔に答える。

예시: I prefer urban views. I enjoy the variety of architecture and the vibrant street life, and landmarks like Tokyo Tower or Tokyo Skytree make cityscapes especially interesting to photograph.

제안: 意図は伝わるが、語彙と表現の選択が不正確で文が冗長・混乱しています（abuse, entrance architecture, crab Lucy）。改善方法：1) 明確な主張で始める（I prefer views in other countries.）、2) 具体例を簡潔に述べる（どの風景が印象的だったか）、3) 固有名詞や名詞を正確に使う（coastal scenery, ancient architecture, Old Town）、4) 1〜2文で終える。

예시: I prefer views in other countries. For example, when I visited Greece four years ago, the coastal scenery and ancient architecture in the Old Town were breathtaking and left a lasting impression on me.

× When I was a university student, I, uh, about five years ago, I often took photos of campers to keep memories.

✓ When I was a university student, about five years ago, I often took photos of campus scenes to keep memories.

The original sentence uses 'campers' which likely is a wrong word choice for 'campus' or 'campus scenes'. This is a vocabulary error rather than a tense issue, but it also contains minor word order problems ('I, uh, about five years ago' is disfluent). Correction removes hesitation and places the time phrase correctly. Suggestion: remove filler words, place time expression near the verb, and use the correct noun 'campus scenes' for locations to be photographed.

× But now I usually take pictures in the city near my workplace because I enjoy urban architecture and through those scenes.

✓ But now I usually take pictures in the city near my workplace because I enjoy urban architecture and those scenes.

The phrase 'and through those scenes' is ungrammatical and unclear. Removing 'through' makes the sentence grammatically correct and coherent. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary prepositions and keep parallel structure: 'enjoy A and B.'

× I would like urban views because our architecture is imaginable and exciting for us, especially our abuse in Tokyo Tower or sky trees.

✓ I prefer urban views because the architecture is imaginative and exciting, especially attractions like Tokyo Tower or Tokyo Skytree.

Several problems: 'would like' is acceptable but 'prefer' suits the question better; 'our architecture' and 'for us' are unnecessary and unclear; 'imaginable' is wrong adjective — 'imaginative' fits; 'abuse' is incorrect word choice for 'attractions' or 'landmarks'; 'sky trees' should be 'Skytree' or 'Tokyo Skytree'. Suggestion: use correct adjectives ('imaginative'), correct nouns ('attractions' or 'landmarks'), and precise proper names.

× Four years ago I went to Greece and I prefer abuse in other countries like Greece because the coastal scenery and entrance architecture are breathtaking that report very memorable.

✓ Four years ago I went to Greece, and I prefer attractions in other countries like Greece because the coastal scenery and ancient architecture are breathtaking and very memorable.

Mixes past time ('Four years ago I went') with present preference; that's acceptable but wording 'prefer abuse' is wrong — 'attractions' fits. 'Entrance architecture' is likely 'ancient architecture' or 'interesting architecture'; 'that report very memorable' is ungrammatical. Correction uses 'are breathtaking and very memorable.' Suggestion: choose correct nouns, adjust adjective ('ancient' if intended), and use proper conjunctions to connect clauses.

× I love the crab Lucy and atmosphere of the Old Town which made strong impression on me.

✓ I loved the food, local culture, and the atmosphere of the Old Town, which made a strong impression on me.

'I love the crab Lucy' is unclear — likely meant a local dish (e.g., 'crab dishes' or a proper name 'bouillabaisse'?) and mixes present 'love' with past impression. 'Made strong impression' needs an article: 'made a strong impression.' Correction generalizes to 'the food, local culture' and uses past 'loved' to match 'made a strong impression.' Suggestion: use specific nouns correctly, include articles where needed ('a strong impression'), and keep tense consistent when describing past experiences.