Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers (uh, um) and repetition. Mention specific places or reasons and one result of taking photos to show purpose.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often visit the seaside and nearby mountains to capture sunsets and wide landscapes, which helps me improve my composition and camera skills.

제안: This answer is unclear and contains many hesitations. Start with a direct opinion (urban or rural), then give one or two clear reasons with linking words (because, for example). Keep sentences short and avoid interruptions. Use specific examples (skyscrapers, parks, villages) to support your choice.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy photographing architecture and city life. For example, I like shooting tall buildings and busy streets, which offer interesting shapes and activities to capture.

제안: Be more fluent and specific: state your preference clearly, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Mention particular places or features in your country and explain why they are good for photography to add detail and avoid repetition.

예시: I prefer taking photos in my own country because it has diverse landscapes and famous landmarks. For instance, I can photograph historic temples and coastal scenery, which provide varied subjects and vibrant colors for my photos.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because taking pictures uh, can help me to improve my taking pictures skill and I also can uh, I always go to the sea or go to the mountain to take the different views.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because taking pictures can help me improve my photography skills, and I often go to the sea or mountains to take different views.

The phrase 'help me to improve my taking pictures skill' is awkward and ungrammatical. Use the gerund noun 'photography' or 'taking photos' and make 'skill' plural: 'photography skills'. Also remove the unnecessary 'to' after 'help' and simplify 'I always go to the sea or go to the mountain' to 'I often go to the sea or mountains'. These changes make the sentence natural and grammatical.

× I do you prefer view urban areas or miracles? Urban is means that the city lures is missed.

✓ Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas? Urban areas are cities, while rural areas are the countryside.

The original contains many structural and word-choice errors: 'I do you prefer' is incorrect question word order; 'view urban areas or miracles' is misheard/mistyped—should be 'views in urban areas or rural areas'; 'Urban is means that the city lures is missed' mixes words and is ungrammatical. Correct question formation and clear definitions correct meaning and grammar.

× Eh this one ah also can practice you like eh finish or not still a lot.

✓ Also, this can give you a lot of practice whether you finish or not.

The original is fragmented and unclear. Reorder to a coherent clause: 'this can give you a lot of practice' and clarify the dependent phrase 'whether you finish or not' to complete the idea. Improve fluency by removing filler sounds.

× Do you want me to continue Nah like you to confuse your speaking use the app I continue to iron.

✓ Do you want me to continue? I don't want to confuse you while you're practicing speaking; shall I continue?

The original is incoherent with filler words and incorrect phrases ('Nah like you to confuse your speaking use the app I continue to iron'). Provide a clear question and intention: offer to continue and avoid causing confusion. Use proper sentence punctuation and logical structure.

× I like to I prefer to take the photos in our country because my countries is a beautiful country.

✓ I prefer to take photos in my country because my country is beautiful.

Redundant 'I like to I prefer to' should be simplified to one verb phrase, e.g., 'I prefer to take photos'. 'My countries is' is a subject-verb agreement and number error: use singular 'my country is'. Also 'a beautiful country' can be shortened to 'beautiful'. These corrections fix tense, agreement, and redundancy.

× There are many famous tourist spots that I can take a photo and go there to take some beautiful pictures.

✓ There are many famous tourist spots where I can take beautiful pictures.

The clause 'that I can take a photo and go there to take some beautiful pictures' is wordy and repeats 'take'. Use a relative adverb 'where' to indicate location and simplify to 'where I can take beautiful pictures'. This corrects redundancy and improves clarity.