Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and correct tense errors. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. For example, when I travel to a new city I always photograph landmarks and street scenes because photos help me remember the atmosphere and details of the place.

제안: Start with a clear preference statement, then give specific reasons and one short example. Correct grammar (use "prefer X to Y", singular/plural, and smoother phrasing). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas to those in cities. I grew up in a small town surrounded by forests, so I enjoy wide open spaces and natural scenery, such as walking trails and river views, which feel relaxing and peaceful.

제안: Give a direct answer and support it with a clear reason and a specific example. Avoid filler words (uh, umm) and awkward phrasing about social media—focus on feelings or learning. Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new and different landscapes and cultures. For example, seeing historic architecture or unusual natural scenery abroad inspires me and gives me stories to share with friends.

× Yes, I do really love taking pictures in different views, especially when I was traveling or one I am in a popular city or whenever I am in the place that I haven't been before because it makes me feel or it makes me remember the place that I've visited and I really.

✓ Yes, I really love taking pictures of different views, especially when I am traveling, when I am in a popular city, or whenever I am in a place I have not been to before because it makes me remember the places I have visited.

The original mixes past and present incorrectly (e.g., 'when I was traveling' with general habit 'I do really love'). Use present simple or present continuous for general preferences and experiences. Change 'taking pictures in different views' to 'taking pictures of different views' (preposition correction) and simplify clauses. Use present perfect 'have not been to' and 'have visited' to refer to prior experiences. Also remove redundant fragments and fix word order. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I prefer rural areas than urban areas because I grew up in a very a tiny town which is full of adventurous and full of the forest.

✓ I prefer rural areas to urban areas because I grew up in a very small town that was full of adventure and surrounded by forest.

Use 'prefer X to Y' not 'prefer X than Y' (preposition). 'A very a tiny town' has an extra article and awkward adjective; use 'a very small town' or 'a tiny town'. 'Full of adventurous' is incorrect; use the noun 'adventure' or adjective 'adventurous' to describe a person. 'Full of the forest' is unnatural; 'surrounded by forest' is clearer. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× One we one, we are step one, we see a lot of the forest and so I.

✓ When we were young, we often explored the nearby forest and saw a lot of trees.

The original is fragmented and unclear ('One we one, we are step one'). It appears to attempt to describe childhood experiences, so restructure to a clear past-tense sentence: 'When we were young, we often explored the nearby forest and saw a lot of trees.' This fixes sentence fragments and clarifies meaning. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I would say I prefer views in other countries because, uh, that is the thing that we haven't been to before and then we can just, umm, keep it in our stories or our Facebook and our in online.

✓ I would say I prefer views in other countries because they are places we have not been to before, and then we can share the photos on our stories or on Facebook and other online platforms.

Replace vague 'that is the thing' with 'they are places' to match plural 'views'. Use present perfect 'have not been to' for prior experience. 'Keep it in our stories' is informal and unclear; use 'share the photos on our stories'. Fix preposition 'in online' to 'on... online platforms'. The modal 'would' is acceptable for polite opinion, but clarify surrounding wording. Grammar problem type ID: 4

× So it makes me feel that I can travel another country, which.

✓ So it makes me feel like I can travel to another country.

The original ends with an incomplete clause ('which') and contains awkward phrasing. Use 'feel like I can travel to another country' to complete the idea and include the correct preposition 'to' with 'travel'. This fixes the sentence fragment and strange ending. Grammar problem type ID: 26}]} PMID:0