Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., verb forms, articles) and avoid repetition like "taking pictures" multiple times.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I go out with friends and the weather is nice, I often take photos of landscapes and interesting scenes to remember the day.

제안: Answer directly then add a specific reason with linking words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "rural" or "countryside") and correct minor grammar ("older areas" is unclear).

예시: I prefer rural views because I dislike crowded, traffic-heavy streets. For instance, I usually photograph trees, fields and quiet lanes since they look more peaceful and natural.

제안: Be clear and structured: give a direct preference, then one or two specific examples or reasons. Avoid filler words and repetition. Improve grammar and word choice (e.g., "prefer views in other countries", "Switzerland has beautiful landscapes").

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer landscapes I can't find at home. For example, Switzerland's mountains, forests and waterfalls are famous for their dramatic scenery and are very inspiring to photograph.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, my memories or phone memories almost full of taking pictures.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views; my phone memory is almost full because I take so many photos.

The original sentence is a run-on with unclear structure and missing verb agreement. It combines two ideas without proper punctuation and uses 'my memories or phone memories almost full of taking pictures' which is ungrammatical. Use a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses, use 'phone memory is almost full' for subject-verb agreement, and add 'because' or a clause to explain the reason. Keep sentence concise and clear.

× When I am go with my friends to outside and see any landscape and beautiful weather I often take pictures.

✓ When I go out with my friends and see a nice landscape or good weather, I often take pictures.

The phrase 'When I am go' incorrectly mixes auxiliary 'am' with base verb 'go'; use the simple present 'go' for habitual actions. 'To outside' is incorrect preposition use; use 'go out'. 'See any landscape and beautiful weather' is awkward; use 'see a nice landscape or good weather'. Place commas to separate the subordinate clause. This keeps tense consistent for habitual actions.

× I prefer to take pictures in older areas because I do not like congested and traffic areas, so I always prefer to take pictures of trees and nature.

✓ I prefer taking pictures in older areas because I do not like congested, traffic-heavy places, so I usually photograph trees and nature.

'Congested and traffic areas' is awkward; use 'congested, traffic-heavy places' to modify the noun correctly. Use 'prefer taking' or 'prefer to take' consistently. Repetition of 'prefer' can be reduced; use 'usually photograph' for variety. This improves adjective order and word choice.

× So I love to travel and for and here I am say that I can prefer news from other countries because like there are many countries which are very famous for their nature nature beauty.

✓ I love to travel, and I prefer views from other countries because many of them are famous for their natural beauty.

The original sentence contains extraneous words ('for and here I am say') and redundancy ('nature nature beauty'). It lacks clear structure. Simplify to 'I love to travel, and I prefer views from other countries' and use 'natural beauty' as the correct noun phrase. This fixes sentence structure and redundancy.

× Like Switzerland is a lot of trees and waterfalls, natural waterfalls which in interact the person.

✓ For example, Switzerland has many trees and natural waterfalls that attract people.

'Like Switzerland is a lot of trees' is ungrammatical; use 'Switzerland has many trees'. 'Natural waterfalls which in interact the person' is incorrect phrasing; use 'that attract people' to express purpose. Replace 'like' with 'for example' or 'such as' to introduce examples. This corrects verb usage and clarifies the meaning.