Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap doğal ve samimi ancak biraz dağınık ve tekrarlı. Konu cümlesi var fakat fazla tekrar ve gereksiz detaylar var (“me, myself and my family and my friends”). Destekleyici ayrıntılar eklenebilir (hangi tür manzaralar, hangi hayvanlar, neden fotoğraf çekmeyi sevdiğiniz). Bağlaçlar kullanarak cümleleri daha akıcı ve mantıklı hale getirin. Cevabı 3-4 cümle ile sınırlayın ve gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I especially like cityscapes and coastal scenes because of the light and colors, and I often take portraits of my family and friends on special occasions. I also enjoy photographing animals, particularly birds, since I find their behavior fascinating.

제안: Cevap tutarsız ve belirsiz; ‘urban areas’ demenize rağmen ‘cows’ gibi kırsal bir öğeyi örnek veriyorsunuz. Aynı zamanda çekinme ve dolgu kelimeleri (“uh”, “I think I say like this”) konuşmayı zayıflatıyor. Net bir konu cümlesi kurun, tutarlı nedenler verin ve dolgu kelimelerini azaltın. Örneğin, şehir manzaralarını sevme sebeplerinizi (mimari, hareketlilik, ışık) açıklayın veya kırsal alanları tercih ediyorsanız bunu açıkça söyleyip örnek verin.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the architecture and lively streets, which offer interesting photo opportunities. For example, I like photographing old buildings and busy markets since they have unique colors and textures. However, I also appreciate rural scenes occasionally for their peaceful atmosphere.

제안: Cevap açık fakat tekrarlı ve dilbilgisi hataları var („because of I have never gone", fazladan “maybe” ve üç kez “very”). Daha doğru ve kendinden emin ifadeler kullanın; nedenlerinizi somutlaştırın (örneğin belirli yerler veya özellikler). Cümleleri kısaltıp bağlantı ifadeleriyle mantıklı bir akış sağlayın.

예시: I prefer the views in my own country because I am familiar with its landscapes and cultural landmarks. For instance, I love the seaside areas and historic neighborhoods, which offer varied and picturesque scenes. I hope to visit other countries in the future to compare their views.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views and also I like taking pictures of me, myself and my family and my friends.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views and I also like taking pictures of myself, my family and my friends.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' should be used instead of 'me' when the subject and object refer to the same person. Use 'myself' for emphasis or when the subject performs the action on the same person. Suggestion: replace 'me, myself' with 'myself' or use 'me' only in informal contexts but not together with 'myself'.

× I think I say like this, uh, because I was born in Istanbul and I was grown in Istanbul, so I am into.

✓ I think I say this because I was born in Istanbul and I grew up in Istanbul, so I am into it.

'Was grown' is incorrect passive form; the correct active past tense is 'grew up'. Also 'say like this' should be 'say this' and 'am into' needs an object 'it'. Use the correct past tense verb 'grew up' for upbringing. Suggestion: use 'I was born' and 'I grew up' and finish the phrase with 'into it'.

× Oh, actually I prefer views in my country, but I say that because of I have never gone to any other countries maybe.

✓ Oh, actually I prefer views in my country, but I say that because I have never been to any other countries, maybe.

Use 'been to' for visiting places rather than 'gone to' in this context, and remove the unnecessary 'because of' before a clause. 'Because of' should be followed by a noun phrase, while 'because' introduces a clause. Suggestion: use 'because I have never been to any other countries' and place 'maybe' at the end if needed.