Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện rõ ràng cấu trúc câu, dùng từ chính xác và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Ví dụ: thay “By this way” bằng “In this way” hoặc “Doing so”, sửa “take memory” thành “capture memories”. Giữ độ dài câu vừa phải (tối đa 4-5 câu), dùng liên từ phù hợp để nối ý (because, so, therefore).

예시: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy taking photos when the scenery is peaceful and the lighting is good, because it helps me relax and capture memories of the places I visit. For example, I often take photos at sunset to remember the atmosphere and colors.

제안: Sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp, dùng cụm từ chính xác (ví dụ: “country scenes” thay vì “country signs”), dùng thì và cấu trúc câu thích hợp (help me relax, help me to relax). Thêm lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn để làm rõ ý.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because the country scenes are calmer, with fresher air and wide open spaces that help me relax and reduce stress. For instance, walking by a quiet lake in the countryside always makes me feel more peaceful.

제안: Cải thiện trật tự từ và ngữ pháp, tránh lặp từ và dùng cấu trúc mạch lạc hơn. Ví dụ: “I slightly prefer views in other countries because they feel new and exciting, whereas views in my own country are familiar and comforting.” Thêm một cụ thể ngắn để minh họa lý do.

예시: I enjoy both, but I slightly prefer views in other countries because they feel new and exciting and satisfy my curiosity. In contrast, views at home are familiar and comforting—for example, local landscapes remind me of family trips and childhood memories.

× By this way I can feel relaxed and calm and I can take memory of the place I have been to.

✓ In this way I can feel relaxed and calm and I can take memories of the places I have been to.

Use 'In this way' not 'By this way' (preposition choice). 'take memory' is incorrect collocation; use 'take memories' or better 'keep memories' or 'capture memories'. Also plural 'places' matches 'have been to' if referring to more than one place. Use present perfect 'have been to' correctly to refer to past experiences relevant now.

× I would say I prefer views in rural areas. I find country signs more calmer with more fresh air, open space which helps me in relax and avoid take away from stress.

✓ I would say I prefer views in rural areas. I find countryside scenes calmer, with fresher air and open space, which helps me relax and relieve stress.

Use 'countryside' or 'country' as a noun; 'signs' is wrong. 'more calmer' is incorrect because 'calmer' already comparative, so do not add 'more'. Use 'calmer' not 'more calmer'. 'more fresh air' should be 'fresher air'. 'helps me in relax' should be 'helps me relax' (verb without preposition). 'avoid take away from stress' is ungrammatical; use 'relieve stress' or 'take away stress' — here 'relieve stress' is natural.

× I enjoy both but I slightly prefer in other countries because I feel it new and fresh that I want to explore but my own country I can feel the familiar and the friendly in my own country.

✓ I enjoy both, but I slightly prefer views in other countries because they feel new and fresh and I want to explore them; in my own country I feel a sense of familiarity and friendliness.

Need proper subjects for 'feel' — use 'they' to refer to 'views'. 'I feel it new and fresh' is incorrect word order and pronoun use. Use 'they feel new and fresh'. 'the familiar and the friendly' is incorrect; use 'a sense of familiarity and friendliness'. Maintain present simple tense: 'prefer', 'feel', 'want'.