Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatical: begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Correct verb forms and plural agreement, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words (for example, "for example" or "I often go to").

예시: Yes — I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often visit coastal and mountain areas to photograph landscapes because they offer varied colours and peaceful atmospheres that make photos more interesting.

제안: Start with a clear statement of preference, then give two specific reasons connected with linking words. Avoid vague endings and filler words like "uh." Use correct pronouns and articles ("I prefer rural areas").

예시: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because rural Korea has more mountains and coastal scenery. As a result, the landscapes feel calmer and more photogenic, which is great for relaxing and taking better photos.

제안: Make a direct statement and support it with clear, specific reasons and a brief example. Avoid unclear references ("you") and awkward phrases. Mention a concrete cultural or natural feature and link it to your preference.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because Korea has many scenic spots, such as traditional mountain temples and coastal villages. For instance, historic landscapes have inspired Korean painters for centuries, which shows how visually appealing these places are.

× Those kinds of places is are really good to.

✓ Those kinds of places are really good too.

The subject 'Those kinds of places' is plural, so the verb must be plural: 'are' not 'is'. Also 'to' is incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'too' meaning 'also'. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs and use 'too' for 'also'.

× I prefer you in rural area because in Korea the rural view is better than city view.

✓ I prefer rural areas because in Korea the rural views are better than city views.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrect; the student likely meant 'to be' omitted or 'I prefer (living) in rural areas'. Use plural 'areas' and countable 'views' with plural verbs. Suggestion: remove 'you', use 'rural areas' and plural nouns for comparison and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× I prefer you in rural area because in Korea the rural view is better than city view.

✓ I prefer rural areas because in Korea the rural views are better than city views.

The phrase 'in rural area' needs the article or plural form: 'in a rural area' or 'in rural areas'. Also 'than city view' needs 'than city views' for parallel comparison. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and articles or use plurals for general statements.

× Because in rural place there are a lot of mountains and sea.

✓ Because in rural places there are a lot of mountains and seas.

'Rural place' should be plural or have an article: 'rural places' or 'a rural place'. 'Sea' as a countable noun in this context should be plural 'seas' or use 'the sea' if referring to a specific sea. Suggestion: use plurals for general statements or add appropriate articles.

× So we can, uh, we can feel more.

✓ So we can feel it more.

The repetition 'we can, uh, we can' is redundant and the verb 'feel more' needs an object: 'feel it more' or 'feel more relaxed/connected'. Suggestion: remove hesitation and add a clear object or adjective to complete the meaning.

× I prefer you in my country because Korea is really popular to have nice view and background, so from our ancient they usually do a lot of fresh and peaceful drawings.

✓ I prefer my country because Korea is well known for its beautiful views and backgrounds, and since ancient times people have often produced many fresh and peaceful paintings.

'I prefer you' is wrong; should be 'I prefer my country'. 'Popular to have nice view' is unnatural; use 'well known for' and plural 'views'. 'From our ancient' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'since ancient times'. 'Drawings' in this cultural context is better as 'paintings'. Suggestion: use appropriate collocations ('well known for', 'since ancient times') and correct pronouns.