Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and repetition, give a clear topic sentence then one or two supporting details using linking words. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘photos’ instead of ‘picture’, ‘backgrounds’). Keep it within 2–4 sentences to sound natural.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, whenever I go out with family or friends I often photograph attractive backgrounds and post the best shots on social media, because I like preserving memories and sharing them with others.

제안: Answer directly with a clear preference or state neutrality, then support briefly with a reason using linking words (e.g., ‘because’, ‘so’). Avoid filler words and fragmented sentences.

예시: I don’t have a strong preference between urban and rural views because I enjoy any attractive scene. If I see interesting architecture in the city or a peaceful landscape in the countryside, I will take photos, so I choose based on the scene rather than the location.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and add a specific supporting reason or brief example. Use linking words like ‘however’ or ‘for example’ to make the answer coherent and avoid repetition.

예시: I don’t have a strong preference between domestic or foreign views; I photograph any view I find appealing. For example, when I traveled abroad last year I took many photos of cityscapes, but I also often photograph scenic spots near my hometown.

× Uh, yes, I like, uh, taking picture even I'm fond of uh, taking picture.

✓ Uh, yes, I like taking pictures; I'm fond of taking pictures.

The noun 'picture' should be plural as it refers to the activity of taking multiple photos. Also remove unnecessary fillers and add a conjunction or punctuation for clarity. Use 'taking' correctly with plural 'pictures' to match general preference statements.

× Even most of time whenever I go outside with my family or friends, I always take picture uh, with a good background and upload it on social media.

✓ Most of the time, whenever I go out with my family or friends, I always take pictures with a good background and upload them on social media.

Use the quantifier phrase 'most of the time'. 'Go outside' is better as 'go out' in this context. 'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' and pronoun 'them' is needed to refer back to 'pictures'. Also use 'upload them' rather than just 'upload it'.

× I don't have any specific uh.

✓ I don't have any specific preference.

The sentence is incomplete; 'any specific' needs a noun such as 'preference'. Adding the noun corrects the singular/plural sense and completes the idea.

× I don't have any or specific reason for this even whenever I go even I live in rural area so most time when I get a nice view I just take the picture.

✓ I don't have any specific reason for this. I live in a rural area, but most of the time when I see a nice view I just take a picture.

The original sentence is run-on and repetitive. Split into two sentences for clarity. Use 'a rural area' with the indefinite article. Use 'most of the time' and 'see' instead of 'get' for views. Use singular 'a picture' or plural 'pictures' consistently; here 'a picture' fits each instance.

× It doesn't matter to me like is it's.

✓ It doesn't matter to me.

The fragment 'like is it's' is ungrammatical and redundant. The simple clause 'It doesn't matter to me' conveys the intended meaning. Remove confusing extra words.

× Again, I don't have any specific preference.

✓ Again, I don't have any specific preference.

This sentence is already correct in structure and grammar; no change needed.

× Even where I where I like the view, I take the picture.

✓ Whenever I like a view, I take a picture of it.

Remove the repeated 'where I'. Use 'whenever' to indicate frequency. Use 'a view' and 'a picture of it' to make the object clear and grammatically correct.