Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like "no more"; use "gone" or "no longer there." Keep to 2–4 sentences and correct tense: say "you can look at them later" or "remember the moment."

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, photos help me remember places I’ve visited and share memories with friends. Also, having pictures lets me revisit scenes that have changed or disappeared, so I always take a few shots when I travel.

제안: Make a clear comparison and give specific reasons using linking words. Start with a direct statement: "I prefer urban/rural views." Then add 1–2 reasons (e.g., architecture, lights, variety) and an example. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases like "No more" and "difficulty views."

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because I find the architecture and city lights more interesting. For instance, tall buildings and bridges create dynamic skylines, and at night the illuminated streets look spectacular. In contrast, rural views can be calmer but less varied.

제안: Answer directly and explain reasons with clear vocabulary and linking words. Say "I prefer views in other countries" and then give specific contrasts (e.g., tall buildings, historical sites). Replace incorrect words like "wheels" and "no more" with "views" and "no/there are no." Keep sentences grammatical and concise.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they often have taller buildings and more dramatic landmarks. For example, when I visited Tokyo I was amazed by the skyscrapers and busy streets, which felt much more impressive than the relatively flat cityscapes at home.