Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, add one concrete reason with a brief example, and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words for coherence and correct minor grammar issues (e.g., "when I see" not "when I say").

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember meaningful moments. For example, when I visit a scenic hilltop I take several pictures to capture the sunset and later share my favourites with family. This way I can reflect on the memory and show them what I saw.

제안: Provide a complete, specific reason and a short supporting detail. Avoid unfinished sentences and repetition. Use a linking word to introduce the supporting detail and correct small style issues (avoid filler words like "Oh").

예시: I prefer urban views because cities often feature striking architecture and well-maintained public spaces. For example, I enjoy photographing historic facades and city parks where flowerbeds are neatly arranged, which creates interesting contrasts for my photos.

제안: Avoid repeating the same idea and give a clearer, more specific comparison. Start with a direct statement, then use one or two concrete examples and a linking word to show contrast. Fix repetition and unnatural phrasing.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I often find more modern architecture and iconic skylines there. For instance, cities with tall skyscrapers and distinctive bridges offer dramatic photo subjects, whereas my hometown has fewer tall buildings and a quieter skyline.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I'm someone that likes to reflect and look back at things.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I'm someone who likes to reflect and look back at things.

Use 'who' for people rather than 'that'. 'Who' is the correct relative pronoun when referring to a person. Replace 'that' with 'who' to sound natural and grammatically correct.

× So when I say good views or scenes I prefer I take pictures of them and share with my loved ones.

✓ So when I see good views or scenes I prefer to take pictures of them and share them with my loved ones.

The original has incorrect verb choice and missing 'to' before the infinitive. 'Say' is wrong contextually; 'see' fits. Also use 'prefer to take' and include the object 'them' after 'share' for clarity. This fixes sentence structure and parallelism.

× It's usually good to have.

✓ It's usually nice to have them.

The sentence is incomplete and vague. Adding the object 'them' clarifies what 'have' refers to (pictures) and using 'nice' is more natural than 'good' in this context.

× Oh I definitely prefer the views in urban areas because urban areas are usually more developed and have beautiful buildings, nice flowers that have been trimmed and taken care of.

✓ Oh, I definitely prefer views in urban areas because urban areas are usually more developed and have beautiful buildings and well-tended flowers.

'The views' is acceptable but 'views' without 'the' sounds more natural here. The clause 'nice flowers that have been trimmed and taken care of' is wordy; 'well-tended flowers' is concise and idiomatic. Also add comma after 'Oh'.

× They have amazing.

✓ They are amazing.

'They have amazing' is incomplete because 'amazing' is an adjective that needs a noun or a linking verb. If referring to views or features as amazing, use 'They are amazing.' Alternatively supply a noun after 'amazing'.

× I definitely prefer the views in other countries because those places are more developed than my country.

✓ I definitely prefer views in other countries because those places are more developed than my country is.

Comparative clause needs a verb or pronoun after 'my country' for clarity. Adding 'is' completes the comparison: 'more developed than my country is.' Also 'the views' -> 'views' is more natural.

× In places in those places, they are usually skyscrapers, which are not common in my country.

✓ In those places, there are usually skyscrapers, which are not common in my country.

Original repeats 'places' and uses incorrect word order. Use the existential construction 'there are' to state existence of skyscrapers. This fixes redundancy and grammar.

× They have beautiful flowers, amazing structures.

✓ They have beautiful flowers and amazing structures.

Comma splice/fragment: listing items should use 'and' between final two items. This correction makes the sentence a proper coordinated list.