Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, correct grammar, and reduce fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct errors like singular/plural and common phrases (e.g., “a picture is worth a thousand words”).

예시: Yes, I do. I often take photos at events and while travelling because they help me remember special moments. For example, when I visited the mountains last year, I took many landscape shots that remind me of the light and colors. A picture really can capture emotions that words sometimes cannot.

제안: Give a direct answer first, then support with specific reasons and a clear comparison. Fix grammar and repetition, and avoid contradictory statements. Use linking words like “because” and “however” to structure the response.

예시: I prefer rural views because the countryside feels more peaceful and natural, with open fields and less noise. For instance, I enjoy photographing farmers’ markets and rolling hills, whereas urban scenes are busier and often less relaxing to shoot.

제안: Answer directly, avoid redundancy and filler questions, and provide specific reasons or examples. Correct grammar (e.g., “one of the most beautiful countries,” avoid tag questions) and keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

예시: I prefer views in my own country. I live in Canada, which I find very beautiful and clean, so I enjoy photographing its lakes and national parks. For example, Banff’s turquoise lakes and mountain scenery are perfect subjects for photos.

× I like to take picture whenever I go to any event or on any uh, uh, travel.

✓ I like to take pictures whenever I go to any event or travel.

Use plural 'pictures' for general actions (countable noun). Also use the base noun 'travel' without 'on' in this context or say 'when I travel'. Remove redundant words and unnatural preposition 'on'. Suggestion: say 'I like to take pictures whenever I go to an event or when I travel.'

× Uh, I like to capture picture of the sceneries because it can help me to remember the event and movement.

✓ I like to capture pictures of the scenery because they help me remember the event and moments.

Use plural 'pictures' and uncountable 'scenery' (not 'sceneries'). 'It' is incorrect for plural; use 'they'. 'Movement' is unnatural here; 'moments' fits better. Also omit unnecessary 'to' after 'help'. Suggestion: 'I like to capture pictures of the scenery because they help me remember events and moments.'

× Uh, a picture is worth than 1000 word.

✓ A picture is worth a thousand words.

Idiomatically the expression is 'a picture is worth a thousand words.' Use 'a' before 'thousand' and plural 'words'. Remove 'than'. Suggestion: Memorize the fixed idiom: 'A picture is worth a thousand words.'

× And in this way, uh, picture can show the experience very well.

✓ And in this way, a picture can show the experience very well.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before 'picture' when referring to one picture in general. Without the article the noun is ungrammatical. Suggestion: Use 'a picture' or 'pictures' depending on singular or plural meaning.

× I like to view the the rural areas because the environment of the rural area can be very naturalistic and urban area is not that much that much simple and natural does it?

✓ I like to visit rural areas because the environment there can be very natural, while urban areas are not as simple or natural, are they?

Use 'visit' or 'go to' rather than 'view' for experiencing places. Remove duplicate 'the'. Use 'rural areas' plural consistently and 'there' to refer back. 'Naturalistic' is odd; 'natural' is appropriate. For comparison use 'not as... as' structure and tag question 'are they?'. Suggestion: 'I prefer visiting rural areas because they are more natural, while urban areas are less so.'

× I like to go on urban places to click picture in the fields and.

✓ I like to go to urban places to take pictures in the streets and fields.

Use 'go to' not 'go on'. 'Urban places' is fine but 'click picture' is informal; use 'take pictures'. The sentence was incomplete; supply 'streets and fields' or complete the idea. Ensure parallel nouns. Suggestion: 'I like to go to urban places to take pictures of the streets and parks.'

× I like a view of my own country.

✓ I like the views of my own country.

When speaking generally about the scenery of a country, use plural 'views' or say 'I like the view of my country' with 'the' instead of 'a'. 'The' specifies the country referred to. Suggestion: 'I like the views of my country.'

× I'm living in Canada and it's considered as the beautiful country, one of beautiful country in the world and does it?

✓ I live in Canada, and it is considered a beautiful country, one of the most beautiful in the world, isn't it?

Use simple present 'I live' for a permanent situation. Do not use 'considered as'; use 'considered a'. Include articles: 'a beautiful country' and 'one of the most beautiful'. Use the correct tag question 'isn't it?'. Suggestion: 'I live in Canada, and it is considered one of the most beautiful countries in the world, isn't it?'

× The environment of this country is very clean and hygienic and they're everywhere.

✓ The environment in this country is very clean and hygienic, and cleanliness is evident everywhere.

Replace contraction 'they're' (they are) which is incorrect here. Use noun 'cleanliness' or phrase 'it is clean everywhere.' 'Environment in this country' is more natural. Suggestion: 'The environment in this country is very clean and hygienic; you can see cleanliness everywhere.'

× Is the cleaning less than the most of countries in the world?

✓ Is the level of cleanliness lower than in most countries in the world?

Use 'lower than in most countries' for comparisons. 'Cleaning' is the wrong noun; use 'cleanliness' or 'the level of cleanliness'. Remove extra 'the' before 'most'. Suggestion: 'Is the level of cleanliness lower than in most other countries?'