Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise: avoid hesitations and repetition, use a clear topic sentence, and provide one or two specific supporting details. Also correct grammar (e.g. tense and word forms) and use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views when I travel. For example, I often photograph landscapes and cityscapes to remember the trip, and I usually share the best shots with my family and friends so they can see where I’ve been.

제안: Give a direct, complete answer and avoid unclear or unnecessary words. State your preference (or balanced view) and support it with a clear reason and a linking phrase. Use correct verb forms and avoid filler phrases like 'necessarily' and 'let's get'.

예시: I don't have a strong preference between urban and rural views because each has its appeal. For instance, urban views are exciting because of architecture and lights, while rural views are relaxing because of open fields and natural scenery.

제안: Make the answer more natural and accurate: correct grammar (singular/plural, article use), avoid exaggerations unless explained, and give a specific reason and example. Replace vague phrases like 'queen of world' and 'take pixel' with precise descriptions.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because it has diverse landscapes, such as high mountains and clear rivers. For example, I enjoy photographing mountain sunsets and riverbanks at my hometown, which feel more familiar and meaningful to me.

× Yes, I do, especially when I am traveling somewhere I love to, uh, take picture.

✓ Yes, I do. Especially when I am traveling somewhere, I love to take pictures.

The sentence is missing plural form for 'picture' and needs proper sentence boundaries. 'Take picture' should be 'take pictures' (singular/plural issue, ID 1). Also the run-on structure is fixed by splitting into two sentences and adding commas. Suggestion: use plural 'pictures' when talking about photos in general and separate clauses for clarity.

× It will remem, Remember Me, me, uh, to my visited and I frequently share this picture with my family and friends.

✓ They help me remember the places I visited, and I frequently share these pictures with my family and friends.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear (sentence structure error, ID 26). 'Remem, Remember Me' should be 'help me remember'; 'my visited' should be 'the places I visited'; 'this picture' should be plural 'these pictures' to match context (singular/plural issue, ID 1). Suggestion: use 'help me remember' + 'places I visited' and match plural nouns and pronouns.

× Actually, I have no personal preference. It's depend on the the place necessarily.

✓ Actually, I have no personal preference. It depends on the place.

'It's depend' is incorrect because the verb needs third person singular 'depends' (third person singular issue, ID 2). 'The the' is a duplication and 'necessarily' is unnecessary and awkward here. Suggestion: use 'It depends on the place.'

× I really love to necessarily and also let's get so no matter it's urban or rural.

✓ I really don't have a strong preference; I enjoy places whether they are urban or rural.

Original sentence is incoherent and contains unnecessary words like 'necessarily' and 'let's get so' (sentence structure error, ID 26). 'No matter it's urban or rural' is ungrammatical; use 'whether they are urban or rural.' Suggestion: simplify to express lack of preference clearly.

× I definitely love to see those my own countries because my country is also known as a queen of world.

✓ I definitely love to see my own country because my country is known as the 'queen of the world'.

'Those my own countries' uses incorrect demonstrative 'those' with 'my country' (incorrect use of pronouns, ID 12) and inconsistent number. Also 'queen of world' needs definite article 'the' (article errors, ID 22). Suggestion: use 'my country' and include 'the' before 'world'. If 'queen of the world' is a local expression, put in quotes or explain.

× So there is beautiful mountain also rivers.

✓ There are beautiful mountains and rivers.

Subject-verb and singular/plural mismatch: 'there is' should be 'there are' for plural items, and nouns should be plural 'mountains' (singular and plural issue, ID 1 and subject-verb agreement ID 27). Suggestion: use 'There are' with plural nouns when listing multiple features.

× I love to take pixel there.

✓ I love to take pictures there.

'Pixel' is the wrong word choice; 'pictures' or 'photos' is correct (verb noun choice; treated as singular/plural issue, ID 1). Suggestion: use 'pictures' or 'photos' when referring to photographs.

× So I my personal purpose is my country.

✓ So, my personal preference is my country.

Original is ungrammatical and awkwardly ordered (sentence structure error, ID 26). 'Personal purpose' is incorrect word choice; 'personal preference' fits context. Suggestion: use 'my personal preference is my country' to convey meaning clearly.